I die a little.

Written after a heart-breaking split.

I die a little everytime I look into your
eyes, my head says walk away from it, my
heart believes your lies.

I die a little when you take what I can't
afford to give, when you have my heart and
soul, how am I supposed to live?

I die a little everytime we kiss and say
goodbye, my heart is calling out to you
with every tear I cry.

Author's Note

Please remember that I am not perfect nor is my writing. I do not mind critisizm, but I won't tolerate rudeness. Thank You.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wo this is full of such heartbreaking words... you really pack a lot of emotional punch here... a sad but amazing write.

[Dessa]

I agree with everyone else I saw no flaws, I liked it very much.

[Annie K.]

Who needs to criticize your writing? (In refrence to your note.) That poem was so brilliant and simple and perfect. The rhythm and rhyme was spot on and anyone who has been in love and then became seperated by distance will completely understand your poem. It really captures what that seperation feels like.

[C.J.]

i think i saw no flaws in this poem it was so welly thought out that i think you deserv an aword good job!