Can't Be My Life

This one kind of came on out of nowhere but it's one of my favorites

Forgive and forget really rolls off the tongue

But if you try to make it happen

It’s easier said than done

And every little mistake gets stuck in your head

No matter how hard you try

You can’t replace the negative

*chorus*

So you run

And you hide

And you keep it all wrapped up so tight

Deep inside, until it all comes back to life

Then you cry

And you scream

And you punch the wall ‘till your knuckles bleed

And the pain subsides

Come on there’s gotta be more to life

*end chorus*

When your heart’s in two and you just don’t know

Where the hell that road

Is taking you

So you stand stone cold and let it all pass you by

But the pain doesn’t go away

(But the pain doesn’t go away)

*chorus*

So you run

And you hide

And you keep it all wrapped up so tight

Deep inside, until it all comes back to life

Then you cry

And you scream

And you punch the wall ‘till your knuckles bleed

And the pain subsides

Come on there’s gotta be more to life

*end chorus*

Yeah I run

And I hide

From a part of me that I don’t like

Yeah I cry

And I scream

Cause the pieces don’t add up to me

I’ve gotta release these parts of me

But I am too afraid

I am too afraid

*chorus*

So I run

And I hide

And I keep it all wrapped up so tight

Deep inside, until it all comes back to life

Then I cry

And I scream

And I punch the wall ‘till my knuckles bleed

And the pain subsides

Come on there’s gotta be more to life

This really can’t be my life

*end song*

 

Reviews

[Gedalya]

The verses are strong, you may want to include a bridge.

[Be A Fighter]

there is a bridge but I don't label those

[Gedalya]

Yeah, I noticed that. . . lol I just thought that it may have been a third verse. My usual method when I would write was typically 4 stanza verses (8 lines) small pre-chorus, chorus, repeat or new verse (4 lines this time), pre-chorus, chorus, bridge, chorus. . . etc,.

[Be A Fighter]

I don't have a method. I don't like to write with a plan.

[Be A Fighter]

I don't believe in every song being the same style.

[Gedalya]

Well, it's actually impossible to do that? Unless, it's punk music XD. One chord all day.

[Be A Fighter]

No like, the same structure as you said. I don't write with a specific structure in mind. It comes together as I go. Punk music isn't one chord all day by the way, I would know I play it.

[annabellee]

Lovely. It has a really good flow and rhymes.
I really enjoyed reading it :)

[Be A Fighter]

thank you :)

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)