War Heart

A Poem by ShayElexis(:

Simple heart break poem

Broken heart
Torn down barriers
Burned trust
Raised guard
Fragile truth
Solid lies
Stuck in love...

© 2013 ShayElexis(:

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Lucien Maier

Love the line stuck in love.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Dream Mistress

loved it wonderful

Posted 11 Years Ago

marie

its beautiful, but i can't help but feel that it is unfinished. the truth in it is so baffling and heartbreaking that i find myself lost in memories of a similar pain thank you for sharing

Posted 11 Years Ago

Dream Mistress

Posted 11 Years Ago

Martin Ramirez

It tells a story in 7 lines, using just adjectives and nouns. I like it, it makes great imagery in those short lines.

Posted 11 Years Ago

TLK

This would have more impact if every line was two words.

The last one is easy: "stuck love" is an excellent phrase/image to end the piece. It doesn't give too much away and has multiple meanings.

"Torn barriers" also works pretty well. It does perhaps invite some sexual connotations, though.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on January 3, 2013
Last Updated on January 3, 2013
Tags: broken, heart, war, love, truth, lies, pain

Author

ShayElexis(:

Fredonia, KS

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I am me. I'm a blunt and bitchy writer who is working on getting her associates for English/Creative Writing and is just trying to make it through life without killing someone. I love poetry, short st.. more..