Lucy was a girl of ten

A poem about a girl who was stuck in an abusive family

Lucy was a girl of ten

She wrote her feelings with a pen

Sadistic and possessed 

To a life that sure would test

As she draws, her feelings clear

Suddenly pulled by her ear

Her mother furious at the things she see’s

Her anger was the key

I’ll break your hand you little cow

Said her mother with a howl

Put to bed without a meal

Loved she did not feel

With the sound of boots

Lucy shook with fear

For that fat b*****d 

daddy was here

Unable to take that feeling once more

She opened the window and blocked the door

As daddy broke in she jumped with a cry

Falling to her death hoping to fly

As police inspected what happened  that night

They found a drawing that gave them a fright

It was a picture of terror, of Lucy’s admission

Finally putting her parents into submission  

Reviews

[Miss unknown]

I like the storyline of this poem, but it is depressing. :) good work! just watch out for the s and 's though!

[Crayon]

This is undeniably creepy. I think it is creepy in a good way though, I like it. And as has been said before, you have really nice flow with your writting. Beautiful, erie and perfect. Well done. Really well done.

[trainwreck]

This was dark. your style flows pretty well, but could still use some cleaning up.

[Frozen Snow]

I love the way this flows!