The Place Where Secrets Are Kept

 

The doors groan in their pain

and squeal

as though bitten.

Windows......leak tears out of glassy eyes,

and the animal rolls over,

for one last scratch.

 

Shiny silver light switches

Blink- Startled.

They don’t know.

They weren’t here.

But they watch, from the place,

where secrets are kept.

 

The heart bleeds,

 a river...

down front steps.

Anaemic.

 

The house shuts its front door

and hardens.

Waiting for something pure......

or the end of eternity.

Reviews

[Adela Muresan]

Wow, I read this poem for like five times.
You should seriously think about postin' in some contests pal, you really got style.
The theme of inner emptiness is very used in poetry but very rarely in such an original manor ( especially in the last strophe ).
I like the concept of the place were the secrets are kept�but I'm not sure I completely grasped it :P. Do you mean the secrets of loving�in the right way?

A.M.

[SilentDream]

I really liked the qualities given to inanimate objects. If walls could talk...
Here, everything sees and speaks in its own way. Wonderfully done!

Pen on ~SilentDream

[Matt Penrose]

Great imagery Breeza! Another lovely poem.

[Thomas James Martin]

enjoyed it; some memorable lines and imagery.
tom

[Ricohard]

Whoa whoa whao! Crap.
Such strong visuals. Your use of words seems to be getting better and better.
Your poetry is incredible.

ps. Would you love a black man?

[An owl on the moon]

So powerfully moving, vivid in your landscape of a world passed by... A world now forgotten sitting locked and alone yet full of the secrets of lives long gone... Amazing in every way!

Craig

[Ally Baker]

wow, such a great poem! i agree, it did have great imagery, thanksomuch for sending me a read request for this poem! i really liked it, great job! keep up the good work!

Luhv,
Ashley A

[chord0]

In this poem: Animals and Man look for a salvation for the World and Nature in God (where the secrets are kept). Great imagery, great poem.
Keep up the good work
chord0
p.s. Check out my Anthology of Spanish poetry, in webook.com, please review, I am thinking of sending it to publication soon.
thanks

[Mel Stevens]

Wonderful imagery. Love the way you use a house for the emptiness.