The Pauper McCarty

A poem about a night of fun

It was quite late in the fall

After a quiet ball

During the late night hours

With cocktail drinks and dancing

And many bachelors a-glancing

At pretty younger girls

And all their curls

That Madame L’eve

In all of her speed

Ran quite right into me

 

Now she didn’t see me

So I left her be

After a quick pardon me

But she let slip

In my pocket

A little note indeed

 

It was no bill fortunately

As I unwrapped it in my hand

But I found it much worse

So I let out a curse

For on it was scribbled a time and date

Requesting a me as a play mate

 

Tis a shame for a party so smashing

To end with this written lashing

To my entire good name and fortune

For I’m a man with the best taste

Who refrains from women so chaste

 

I laughed it off and smiled again

For this wasn’t the start or end

Many old widows and bachelorettes

Black, brown, blond and brunettes

Agree I am cursed as the greatest temptation

And what can I do with this expectation?

 

So they come year around

There isn’t a season my body surrounds

It belongs to all who seek it out

Like I was water…in a drought

 

Fortunately Madame L’eve

Didn’t spend her night with me

But the Duchess of France

Allured me with her trance

 

And there it is, my life’s story

Feeding off not fame or glory

But of the rich women at a dull party

And that’s me, the Pauper McCarty

 

Author's Note

I am a younger writer and am still, as is everyone, seeking much needed help; critiquing and constructive criticisms will be noted and greatly appreciated

Reviews

[The Winter Grey]

To be a novice, you possess a considerable talent, I wouldn't have pegged you for a beginner. I enjoyed the use of language in this piece, I felt as if I had stepped into eighteenth century England. By the end of the poem, I really felt acquainted with this character, this "Pauper of McCarty." So on top of penning a classy, entertaining poem, you also show considerable talent at action-based characterization - a talent most writers lack. Well done.

[Tai Ryens]

The story was nicely written and narrated by you, especially given the fact that you're new to this writing thing. I liked the light humour embedded here, too. That was interesting. The rhymes were fun, but the flow could have used a lot of work, especially around the beginning. That's just me though, you could have added in words and removed some to help it flow more nicely.
Well written poem. Keep working towards it, you'll get better.

[Hyatt Vincent]

Wow, i enjoyed tht! well written! (:

[No name]

I love this poem, it was awesome.

[paparapapa]

This is seriously awesome. I loved the story and how you narrated it with all the humor was just brilliant! This is the best way of bragging! Acting cool and nonchalant. Haha. Loved this. It flowed smoothly and the rhymes made it fun to read. Thanks for submitting this to my contest. :)

-A License to Brag-