Let the lies out

Yes boy you are beautiful just the way you are
But you've heard that more times than the number of stars
We can sit here and spew out nice romantic crap
about how our future will be as a beautiful map


I'm not going to do that here right now
Instead I'm going to spew out something that will count
What is about to be said may sound harsh
and mean and crude and just plain rude


This is the truth no one will say it
My temper is bad, but man it can be saved
but sometimes i just can't be tamed
There will always be those days when i lose my self
cause everything is gone like my car and all the wealth


I will throw things and scream like every other girl
things will be said that will make you want to hurl
You will be locking the door and calling friends to come pick you up
You will only get their answering machines and stuff

So once again i don't spew out things i don't mean
Our future is not made by the qualities that make me gleam
Its the truth that really matters
It wouldn't be fair to invest in anyone without revealing my life of tatters


The point is i can not promise perfection
If you expect that you are looking in the wrong direction
A marriage of mine will not fail
I will tell you about myself in the smallest detail
I may leave for an hour or two after i pack
but i promise you it will only be for an hour and i will always come back

If my love will fail then it was not love
I do not commit if i don't feel it from above
That is how you can be sure I am for you


I am not like the others who give up and leave
remember i live not for myself and that is how life should be perceived

For all who read this you probably think i am a freak
I did the uncommon thing and told you everything a boy wouldn't seek
Everyone has terrible qualities, but fail to show it until later
Flaunting it, i make sure everyone knows about mine
it needs to be simple to admit you are not always a flower
I did it to prove i finally am not a coward

Reviews

[That1Nerd23]

Amen! This is great! I love how you are so willing to cast your weakness into the hands of the public. I totally agree, wearing a mask will only help a moment, it's the lifetime in front of you that you must strive to make reasonable. I love the honesty and the energy in this poem! I thoroughly enjoyed it, keep writing!

[Brielle Cartny]

Thank you so much!!

[That1Nerd23]

You're welcome!

[Veronica Chandler]

I enjoyed the write very much; how you laid yourself bare, and truth to be told. "Freak"...I think not! The truth it is a beautiful thing and being so real is a courageous and honorable way to be in the world. I commend you and think more of us could take our Que from one such as you. This is a very well written piece and the truth is exquisitely told.

[Brielle Cartny]

That really means a lot thank you very much! Hiding anything never worked for me. I do not have as much pressure because nobody in this world believes i am perfect, but rather they believe i try my very best. I mess up a lot though.

[Veronica Chandler]

My pleasure...Messing up is a big part of how we learn.

[Quexycyclops]

Straightforward and authentic- I like this! Easy to relate to- it seems society in general would rather not say the honest and sometimes hard thing to one's face. "If my love will fail then it was not love"- so true. Good piece of work here.

[Brielle Cartny]

I really appreciate that!

[Sami Khalil]

I'm not like the others who give up and leave.
A nice write .

[Brielle Cartny]

Thank you very much!! Hope you had a fantastic holiday!

[Sami Khalil]

You too. I appreciate that...:)

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

I love this. A total twist on regular love poems. Truthful and beautifully honest. I especially love the lines:
"For all who read this you probably think i am a freak
I did the uncommon thing and told you everything a boy wouldn't seek"
Great piece

[Brielle Cartny]

Thank you so much! I am just very tired of all the relationships failing because the good qualities quickly fade. I wanted this to mean more than cliche.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

And you definitely achieved that with this!

[RachelReaper]

Powerful, blunt, to the point, and not holding anything back. Awesome job, no need to mask who you really can be, I agree with you

[Katie Flores]

"remember i live not for myself and that is how life should be perceived "
- was taken back, in a good way, when I read this line. Most people dont want to admit it. Today you are supposed to put yourself before others, and satisfy your needs by using people. Thank you for putting that out there.


it needs to be simple to admit you are not always a flower
I did it to prove i finally have the bloody power

I love this line. nuff said.

[Brielle Cartny]

Thank you! So many marriages are created and destroyed by not revealing problems and its so important. We all have them. It just isn't good to have a surprise problem.