The Forgotten

The streets are filled with people who have seemingly slipped through the cracks.

            The Forgotten
 
                                      Dirty faces, smelly clothes,
                                      hearing voices, tales of woes.
                                      The Forgotten.
                                      Wanderers  of the street,
                                      napping, dreaming at our feet.
                                      The Forgotten.
                                      Some are scary, some are kind,
                                      the scattered people, that are left behind.
                                      The Forgotten.
                                      Someone`s mother, someone`s dad,
                                      some only exist in the memories they had.
                                      The Forgotten.
                                      Most are hungry, some gone mad,
                                      to see the unloved, makes me sad.
                                      The Forgotten.
                                      Some may be angels, to see what you will do.
                                      All it could take is one bad break, and
                                      the forgotten could be you

Reviews

[Scytheriax]

I think "cloths" was meant to be "clothes"
In the second line, perhaps "tells" is supposed to be "tales"?
If not, perhaps rephrase.
In the tenth line, you left out an apostrophe for "someone's"
The meter is a little off here and there.
The imagery is good, though.

[realmwriter]

It, to me, is kind of like saying, Hey because your clothes are dirty we won't give you a chance in this world. I know there is a point to grammar and all of that good stuff but if one gets the gist of what another trying to communicate, then what is the point in pointing out his grammar mistakes?

[realmwriter]

It paints a ruffer picture of exactly what "the Forgotten" look like. They are not a pretty smile placed on the face just so to convey a happier time. They are more like the upside down smile, the one known as a frown, at least it paints a picture of what their life is now. Cause what they had before may or may not have defined them but when your this far lost and gone, it really does begin to define your life from then on. It's a struggle no matter the person in the fight, sometimes, just to make it through one more night...!

[Demi Rose]

disturbingly sad yet realistic and well penned.

[HeIsWe]

Good

[Poetic Beauty]

The Forgotten is a great way to phrase this thought. Many times we drift about our daily business in our lives and don't pay attention to the people who are homeless. Its as if we have tunnel vision and we either don't want to pay attention to them or subconsciously we simply don't and pass by without a second thought. I truly try not to do this and try to make a point to give a dollar or two if I see someone on the street.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

you certianly capture the sense of being forgotten so nicely...and create that sad tone that adds to the read :)

[Raven Starhawk]

So sad and its melancholy lingers long after I have finished reading. There is such tragedy that exists this this world and to take it all in and truly give it thought is heartbreaking.