Beyond Broken

Just the intro to my book.

The rain causes a soft drumming sound on the roof of my house. I sit at my desk, fingers flying across the keyboard. My dog, Scythe, watches me from my bed in concern. I am writing a book, a book about depression. Scythe has been my dog since I was ten. Now I'm 21, living alone. A clap of thunder shakes the house and Scythe gives in to his worry, trotting to my side.

I reach down and scratch behind his ears, his Border Collie playfulness not showing. Scythe is a Nova Scotia Duck Tolling Retriever, Border Collie mix. I check the clock in the corner of my computer screen again and sigh. 1:17 AM. I stand, closing my document, and walk to my bed. Scythe follows me closely, leaping onto the bed.

I lie beside him, closing my eyes but unable to sleep. All I can think about is my girlfriend, Faithe. We have a date tomorrow �" Well, today really �" at 6:30 PM. I toss and turn, checking the clock every ten minutes. At 3:00, I get up and walk into the bathroom, searching the medicine cabinet for anything to help me sleep. I pull out my prescription sleeping medication and read the label. Take one as needed. I dump two into my hand and swallow them, making my way back to my bed. I pull the blankets over me and let the surreal world of sleep consume me.

Reviews

[TheLoudSilence]

is this one finished yet? it's a good start, but i am very confused as to why you feel that way. Is it just because of a date or something else. My suggestion is try to explain the emotions a little bit better. I know is just an intro, but the into is important so that it attracts readers. It also ends in a very weird way, like something happened to you because you took 2 pills instead of 1 as advice.

[Caesar]

No, this is not yet finished. I wrote this from first person, though it is not about me. I will definitely work on this, thank you for the advice!