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A Poem by Carmalou
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Story of death...with a twist ;)

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            Red brown emotion reveals fiery eyes upon a star lit night

 

            The pale horse rides through. Fast, faster still, journey incomplete

 

Slap! Sends a wave of chestnut hair to the floor falling to the floor. The pale skin imprinted red, follows to the floor

 

Hurry, rider, hurry! You mustn’t be late! Run faster, Pale Horse

 

A brown boot kicks her ribs. This one will end differently than the others

 

A second kick, a third. Tonight he will not stop, even when, tipping back his bottle, he misses his mouth

Again he kicks her. A scream is to be heard. Pain is all she feels, red anger swells up and bursts, pulsing purple through the room

 

His hand rises for a final time to end her bruised, broken life

 

Hurry, Rider, hurry! Death’s afoot, this cold night. Run faster, Pale Horse!

 

His hand falls, but misses the mark. The mark, herself, found strength for one last fight

 

Almost there, Pale Horse

 

Stumbling, she rises for one final time. Standing, she raises her small hands for The Fight

 

The Pale Horse arrives! The Rider jumps off his horse and runs inside, however unseen

 

He laughs at her defiance to her fate. His laughter rises to a startling high crescendo when… A contraction of the heart, another, and another yet!

He crumples to the floor, fighting with all his might.

 

And Death, riding his Pale Horse away with His prize, laughs at the man and his defiance of his fate.

 

 

 

© 2009 Carmalou


Author's Note

Carmalou
It's kind of experimental so I ignored normal grammar rules..
Also, this is one of few poems I've ever written without a clear title. Suggestions?

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This is pretty cool ^^ I like the format, and it took a sec for me to understand it but that's probably just because I'm kind of tired XD Anyway, as for the title maybe something like "Faster, Pale Horse" or something along those lines :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Interesting concept. Well written. I like the format. Fun read :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow!! this was really a good read. if only every such story would end like this one did!!

as to a sugestion of a title: "The Pale Ridder."

Druid

Posted 10 Years Ago



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