The Fray

The Fray

A Poem by Carolann Dowsett

I'm sad today 
my lights gone away 
and I may never find it again 

The words that you say
when I dare to disobey
leave me in an ocean of pain

You blame me 
for all the things 
that don't seem to  go your way 

You want to die 
you scream and cry 
but I know it's a game that you play 

You manipulate 
with your spite filled words 
place guilt upon everyone else 

Never once thinking 
that it just might be you
who's stirring the fires of hell 

Do you even care 
about the damage you do
when your ripping my heart to shreds

Do you think of the pain
and destruction you cause
when your lying at night in your bed

Or do you rejoice in the suffering 
and despair you inflict 
on those who don't do as you say 

Enjoying the conflict
the buzz that you get 
when you're in the middle of the fray 

© 2013 Carolann Dowsett


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In the second line there should be an apostrophe before the s of lights. as in your light(has) gone away. I believe.

Great descriptive work. Can clearly see this manipulative person who is the subject of this work!

very easy to read and understand and recognize. Wonderful work. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Steve Downen

11 Years Ago

I agree regarding the apostrophe. It will enhance the rhythm.
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Nice job. I like the questions you raise. People don't always realize what they're doing or the ways they damage people with their words or actions. If we knew first hand the effects of our actions we would be more likely to reevaluate ourselves and how we treat one another. Thanks for sharing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Keely Jane, I'm glad you enjoyed.
I like the rhyming pattern in this. I've written a few like it myself. Good job Carolann

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Mark.
this is painful...people can cause us so much misery...when all we want from them is acceptance and love.

really like this...couple spots..."my light's gone away" "when you're ripping my heart to shreds" and "when you're lying in your bed"

sometimes i think people are just mean for the sake of being mean and plot all the bad things they can do to our self-esteem...but.."the meek shall inherit the earth" not these people.

good write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Yes that is very true they will.
A confessional type of write with heartfelt emotions and filled with regret and sorrow. It flows so good and hit a home run at the center of our hearts. I hope all is well after this ordeal....

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

^^~^^ :)
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

:)
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

:):):):)
The second choice....of course they do, or they wouldn't do it! I hear lots of frustration and resentment in this one...good venting, much enjoyed.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much Frieda.
An a*s is an a*s no matter if they wear a hat.
having said that, this is very emotional and honest; hope you followed Quinnfinn's advice,
you deserve better than this; assuming this is not fictional.
Either way thanks for sharing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much. It is real life but its not someone I'm romantically involved with, thank goodness. .. read more
This is a wonderful poem about the flip side of the coin.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
some people exist for the fight, the turmoil and the pain that they cause. best to walk away and leave them as someone else's problem. i feel the pain and doubt in this write. it is profound and real. someone who loves you won't treat you this way. this is a resonant and profound write. well said.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much quinfinn.
Carolann, the meter and rhyme of this poem were superb. It read like a song to me. I ilke the theme as it can apply to almost any disruptive situation. You are a very good poet, I can not wait to read more.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much Jack. Means a lot.

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Carolann Dowsett

Copacabana, NSW, Australia



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