Clover

Clover

A Poem by Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)
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a haiku...with an added twist!

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Lucky leaf clover
A lucky little pleasure
Blowing luck's cover

© 2012 Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)


Author's Note

Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)
Do you guys think "Blowing luck's lover" would have been a better last line? Be honest!

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A beautiful work as it stands. wouldnt change a thing! few words speaking volume!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)

8 Years Ago

thanks!
Minimal , but speaks volumes.

Posted 8 Years Ago


A good read and thought as it is.
To change the last line would mean you would have to change who could read it... and who wants that?


Posted 8 Years Ago


Ohhh yes!!!
I think you are superb at this form, takes focus to deliver so much within a minimal form and I love this :)
I like the line as you have it :)
xoxo

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it. Good Pen. "A lucky little pleasure" When i read this i think of love. And how lucky some of us can or had experienced it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Yeah I think blowing lucks lover would have been cooler but good play on words.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like it the way it is, very creative poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I think it should be left as is. Just fine the way you wrote it great write

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is so meaningful and colorful! My fav line is "Blowing luck's cover"!
Nothing else to say, just wonderful!
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


Fine poem. leave it as it is !

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on May 18, 2012
Last Updated on June 9, 2012
Tags: luck, lucky, clover, four leaf clover, Haiku, nature, clovers, four leaf clovers, tongue twister, alliteration

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Cascara (aka Sprint Goes Cascading!)
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