She was a diamond

We need to be thankful when we hold something precious in our hands.

She was a  Diamond
 
                               20 Nov. 1994
 
The drunk man toasts to better days.
We touched shot glasses.
I asked him.
Did he ever see a woman who shone like a diamond?
So bright  with hope and love.
She can bring you out of this hell?
My drunk friend just turns away.
 
I wander to a safe and quiet corner.
I remember her blue eyes.
Clear as a mountain stream.
Her flowing auburn hair.
Her beautiful smile that still can bring a smile back to me.
 
She was a baby in living.
I was soil with hate and disappointment.
Today I wonder why she came to me?
 
In a dark corner of a dancing Bar in Austin, Texas.
She came to me with a sweet smile.
She asks me.  Could I two-step a-bit?.
I told her I do my best.
 
She talks my ears off.
I listen to her beautiful voice.
She was full of dreams and hope.
We became friends.
 
She taught me laughter.
Taught me to hope and dreams again.
She was a diamond in a life.
Brought me out of my self made hell.
 
I may of taught her to view the world with different eyes.
She stood her ground.
Held on to her dreams.
She is something today.
Educated and helping people.
 
I wish to stand at a distance.
Her life loaded with real problems now.
 
I have hope.
A few dreams.
Maybe one day I will look into those blue eyes.
Thank her for her kindness and love.
 
Women are the reasons for good men to hold on to dreams.
 
I'm thankful.
I held a diamond in my hand.
Her hope and love overtook my heart.
                        
                                  Coyote
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

Author's Note

A old poem when I was roaming Texas. Any mistakes. I would appreciate the help. A wise man is thankful for the assistance of others.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I quite liked this one...it was a story within a poem, and I truly loved the sentiment. We often don't know what we have had until we have let it slip through our fingers...then we write about it. Such is the life of a poet i suppose. You have crafted this with stark and gritty imagery that I truly appreciated. Well done.

[Kat]

Wow, this is beautiful! You write with such emotion that I can almost see what it is you describe. You are a very powerful writer, don't let any typos or such bother you. Your writing is so powerful it's easy to overlook any errors that you might have made.

[Wolf]

awsome write keep em comin

[Eternal.Dreamer]

"Women are the reasons for good men to hold on to dreams.

I'm thankful.
I held a diamond in my hand."

My favorite lines. It feels so good to see that there are still men that can express their feelings like you do, and compare a woman with a diamond. Love it.

[Yana]

This is a wonderful write.

[rayven]

I've been reading your poetry and not really knowing how to review them without just saying "That was amazing." You are a very great poet.
I don't know why, but this one reached out to me enough to give me something to say. The only thing that I'm not very fond of is the inconsistency as far as how many lines you have in each stanza. Maybe it's some advanced writing structure that you're using, but I don't like it. Other than that, this is beautiful and so true.
I'm not sure is you meant for this to happen, but from the lines:
"She talks my ears off.
I listen to her beautiful voice."
I kind of got like a slightly annoyed feeling...Just because when you say something "talks your ear off," it's usually not a good thing...but then it's kind of like, you like her for all that she is...So even though she talks a lot, she has a beautiful voice so you don't mind it as much.
Je ne sais pas!
Again, Great job :D

[Sabbath_Nikole]

This seems so sweet, and sad at the same time, but I havea good feeling sitting in my stomache. Few things, 4th stanza last line I think it needs to be I told her I'd do my best rather than I. And the 3rd stanza was a little confusing for me. Baby in living seemed a little strange to me, and in the 2nd line I think it should be "soiled" past tense since you seem to be reflecting unless you mean that the speaker is like soul, fertilized with hate and disappointment, that makes sense, maybe I just read it wrong now that I'm thinking about it. Well you know what you mean by it. haha. Very good write though. It touched me.

[Elizabeth]

" She was a baby in living.
I was soil with hate and disappointment"

Love those lines.

This is a vivid description of love... the progression and change.
"Women are the reasons for good men to hold on to dreams"
The good ones are, anyway.
This is beautiful.

[Wicahpi]

and I bet she still is :)

another sentimental write.
I still like reading your stories in poetry.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Your words always touch me,always..cause you write with such sensitivity and so much of heart and soul in your words..
Some lines here are so so good,so honest almost sad you know,like
I may of taught her to view the world with different eyes.
She stood her ground.
Held on to her dreams.
She is something today.
Educated and helping people.

I wish to stand at a distance.
Her life loaded with real problems now.
very good..

[JenLyn]

I like it a lot, I love all your writing. Oh, please forgive me for not giving a better review but I haven't slept, keep it up! :)