Insanity

I wrote this after going to the city, there was one particular man there who seemed completely lost in madness. This came to me.

Insanity, insanity

gets in my brain

Insanity, insanity

drives me insane

 

Mutterings and murmurings

over again

when will this craziness

ever end

 

How did I get here

alone in the dark

The world looks so bleak

so cold and so stark

 

Once I knew love

I had found the one

But now I am nothing

but a homeless bum

 

It was the drugs that did it

they messed with my mind

sent my neurotransmitters

spinning out of time

 

Now I live in confusion

nothings the same

This bloody insanity

Has made me insane

 

Reviews

[Mir]

I think this is my favorite poem of yours! I loved the rhyming and just the whole thing was great! :D
'this bloody insanity, has made me insane' Those ones were like the statement of the whole poem! Maybe because it's the last part, but it stood out the most! Great job!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

I know that you have written better poems..but all the same, this is pretty good in my humble opinion

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Overrated-World]

i love it. Amazing piece.
Your rhyming is fluent and it tells a great story.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Jordan's Back]

i like this , it has a lyrical quality and its deep and unique.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you

[Jordan's Back]

:)

[Inda]

This one is fun, love the repetition and it feels very raw! Good Job!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Margarette]

Addicts are everywhere. From the look in their eyes, you can obviously see that they took drugs. People always avoid them thinking that they're out of their minds and since they're under the influence of drugs, they tend to do crazy things. Just like what you've written, bad consequences happen to them leading them to depression. This poem made me think of those people and they should read this before they involve themselves in something more dangerous than drugs. I hope you write more of this and thank you for sharing!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you I'm glad it spoke to you.

[Love Well Spent]

Ohh, I love the rhymes in this one. Made it an easy, enjoyable read. This poem reminds me of a character in a book I just finished reading. He muttered and mumbled and was very confused (and yes, insane) Nice work!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :-)

[Baby Ricochet]

Oh that's just crazy

[Carolann Dowsett]

Haha true :)

[Frieda P]

I like 'insanity driving you insane'...classic! All the best people are a little bit crazy. Nice read.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Night]

There are many like that living without hope...so sad. Some choose to live like that, others are pushed into it. Drugs, mental illness, high cost of living...it can be a harsh world out there. Nice write.:)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Yes that is so true and it breaks my heart. This is the first one I have seen for a while, though, with such madness in his eyes. It was heartbreaking but also rather frightening.

[Night]

...yikes...very scary for a woman...you be careful now...I'll ask God to send extra angels to keep you safe.:)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) Though there were lots of other people around, frightening to see someone that far gone though.

[Ees]

Nice repetition usage. I think that it applies to being insane in many ways. Repeat.

I don't know that drugs can make one insane, but then again, I've seen it with my own eyes...

I am not sure how I feel about the single reference to the "one". It doesn't seem to apply to the rest of the piece if you know what I mean. There is so much repetition that the "one" seems to stick out as not belonging.
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I could be totally off base though.
Overall really nice work.'
Great job!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Cool :) Thank you It's kinda just the way it came out and is supposed to show the loss of a life once lived. Still I'll take another look.