Broken

Like a dagger 
pain cuts 
through my heart 
Love fails 
once again to start 

Too many things 
get in the way 
Misconstrued 
the words I say 

An open wound 
bleeds into my soul 
Broken pieces 
that can never be whole 

Tears fall 
in a cascade of suffering 
Damaged goods 
not worth recovering 

If you see me 
just look away 
I'm not worth knowing 
I'll just cause you pain 

I'm broken inside 
there's no hope for me 
Too much damage was done 
I'll never be free 

Reviews

[Leigh]

I find this very emotional and sad. You sound very defeated, resigned like you have given up, which is sad and not your decision to make, I mean come on you just can't opt out, can you? I feel like a Samaritan talking to a suicidal person, I wouldn't be much good, there figures would be horrendous :-)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Just an expression of the feelings that are there though most days they don't come to the surface. Don't worry I'm not suicidal. Thank you for your review. :)

[Leigh]

No, I didn't think you were, I was reviewing as though it were real if you know what I mean, anyway your work way too balanced not that I'm a shrink either.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) though it is real some days and I probably have opted out on love. I know what you mean though. And thank you I'm glad my work is balanced :)

[Leigh]

I am sorry you feel like that, I do too sometimes and have had more than one mid-life crisis. Does your poetry help? I'm sure it must do, being able to express your thoughts so clearly puts you at a big advantage, whatever your feeling might be and they must in some way give you a lift. Your work makes me feel good so there's a start.

Leigh

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much that makes me happy. Yes it does help a lot, purges the pain off my soul.

[Leigh]

Oh good, I am pleased too, I have used my poetry to help me deal with the death of others, I find it a great healer in a way, I don't care how good or bad it is. Keep writing and stay strong, I will be listening / reading

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much and you do the same :-)

[Dream Weaver]

Love it! This is something I should have written many years
ago...There goes that rhyming again! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Dream Weaver]

You're quite welcome, this truly sums up that of a broken heart and possibly broken dreams..

[Carolann Dowsett]

More like a shattered soul in the process of being repaired. But yeah all that too.

[Dream Weaver]

My theory is; The deeper the scarring the more reason not to repeat the same mistake and the next time you see anything that resembles it run away from it it like you were on fire! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Oh yeah aint that the truth. Probably why I am single and may stay that way forever. :)

[Dream Weaver]

OMG... I wouldn't go that far... if so you just threw hope right out the window! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Nah my hope rests in having peace with no more abuse. But ok there is always hope so you never know.

[Dream Weaver]

Much better! How about we go with optimistically pessimistic?

[Carolann Dowsett]

Sounds like something I can just about manage. :)

[Dream Weaver]

lol me too!

[Baby Ricochet]

PM Time

[Inda]

The truth sets you free- once it's done with you.
Great write, as always. :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :-)

[Mir]

one thing that I love about your writing is that there's a piece that is relatable to everyone. Not like one certain piece relates to every single person, but like there's a piece in your work that touches somebody and everybody has a piece. That sort of thing. (I hope that made sense)
This was so good! I loved it.
I feel like I related to this because of the second to last stanza. I often push people away, and the way I interpreted that part, made it fit perfectly to myself. I'm always afraid that if I get to close to someone, then they'll see everything that I try so hard to try, and then they'll leave. So I often don't let myself get close with anybody.
I probably already said this, but I don't even care. You're so amazing with your words! You may disagree, but I think you could go so much farther than writing on a website. (Not saying you should stop!) I just think there so much talent in you that you deserve to be known more than you are! Sorry if I'm babbling.
Anyways, great work! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow I am so humbled by your words thank you so much. My dream is to publish my novel which I have just started to post on here but as most writers self doubt is a constant battle that we must fight. Your words of encouragement mean so much. Thank you again :-)

[Mir]

Happy to encourage:)! Hope to read a book with your name on it someday!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :-)

[Frieda P]

No pep talk here about how things will look up, blahblahblah. Know where you're coming from, only hope it proves cathartic to purge all this nasty stuff.....

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks Frieda yeah there is always a new day.

[Dr. Wood ?]

i hope that writing this has helped..there is so much sadness here

[Carolann Dowsett]

It's always does :) thank you

[The Nameless]

Full of such pain and sadness.
Like your other poem, still considering others - "I'm not worth knowing, I'll just cause you pain."

Well you definitely are worth knowing, your poetry is really good =D

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[Maria M]

I can feel the pain that you are going through! Its such a strong emotion! Your words flow and connect with each other, something that not all poets have the ability to do! Once again, great job, I loved it!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much.

[Tracey C.]

This is very well-written with a lot of emotion behind this. I love it. Keep it up; things always get better.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you. :)

[Tracey C.]

Very Welcome

[Jack...]

Carolann, once again a very sad offering and I assume the pain must be great, but remember, there is beauty everywhere you look, especially when you look in the mirror. Smile again, let your smile be the glue that repairs what is broken. I know your smile is in there somewhere...let it out.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you Jack, I will smile again, hopefully tomorrow.