Vanish

I hate feeling like this 
so hurt and in pain 
As if nothing that matters
will ever be the same 

The lights gone out 
of my fragile soul 
The darkness has moved in 
taken over control 

I wish I could sleep 
for a thousand years 
Then wake up in heaven 
where there are no tears 

I wish I could fly 
away from this life 
Set my heart free 
let my spirit take flight 

I want to disappear 
Into the darkest void 
From the cruel hearts of man 
where I can't be destroyed

Just vanish from sight

and be no more

But I have to stay

for the ones I adore

 

Reviews

[Devanshu Rajput]

the emotions were flowing from the poem...i know that no hell would be cruel than earth...you are a great writer...the piece was excellently excellent...wonderfully wonderful...and fantasticly fantastic...lovely piece...wonderful read...greatly written...keep writing like this...:-)

DEVANSHU RAJPUT

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much!

[Wpww!!!]

can someone read some of mine!!! pleaze

[Carolann Dowsett]

Later today i will when I've finished my work :)

[Frieda P]

Wooo....this sent a shiver down my spine. It's blaring message of pain, angst and responsibility are quite apparent. Geez, how many times I've wished I could sleep a thousand years. To read it in someone else's pen is distressing. Extremely emotive piece of writing.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thanks Frieda.

[Frieda P]

My pleasure. :-)

[Richard Man]

Was this part of the dark place from where you were or where you unwittingly are going?

[Carolann Dowsett]

A place I sometimes visit I think when life tries to overwhelm me.

[The Nameless]

Great point of view, considering others.

"I wish I could sleep for a thousand years, then wake up in heaven where there are no tears" - wonderful stanza

Short, deep, emotional poem

Well done =D

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Maria M]

So heartfelt! great job :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Inda]

Trapped in their love, that's not too bad is it? Great write.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :) I like that.

[Tracey C.]

Yes! I have felt this way many of times. Very emotional and well-written. Good Job ;D

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you :)

[Tracey C.]

You are welcome =)

[Jack...]

Sadness seems to rain down from your words, seeking an answer, looking for a solution, begging the gates of heaven to open up and let you in, but wait...there are others that still need you and love you. This is the happiness you seek, it will be in their eyes and their hearts. Swing open that gate to your world, you might be surprised at who might just be on the other side.

Well done and touching

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you so much Jack.

[Night]

...I feel you, I do...I am so sorry you hurt...and I understand why too.

[Carolann Dowsett]

Thank you, it's ok, I'll be ok.

[Night]

I know you will....:)