embracing asunder

i cannot go

                so weary

tired of trying to

           find those perfect

spaces

places which cannot

             be

missing so much

   the in between

you

   the upside down

me

 

and the sum of our innocence

                hung   so  delicate

   in that space

your lips

                one lifetime

                (electric pause)

from mine

 

lives fallen together

      the beginning of

    falling apart

those beautiful pieces

       of us

a puzzle in reverse

     dust scattered

 

so dense outside

                these shapeless dreams

    this must be

                                the tart taste

                                the slight shape

       of

 

it’s the here we

                aren’t

your nose

                a breath from mine

our arms

                embracing asunder

Reviews

[Shane William]

Very nice. I really like this. It plays out like scattered puzzle pieces with that final elusive piece slipped in at the end.

[icelandicblue]

The complexities of the puzzle do puzzle us but when we succeed in putting it all together it is truly heavenly. Love your words and their visual placements.

[waif]

I enjoy the sort of sideways cascade of your poems. The formatting of this one really adds to the atmosphere, it's like the days all spilling over into an end, but also endless feeling.

I like, also, that this feels both deliberate but causal at the same time. I mean, I can tell it's framed by rumination, but it feels very natural. I call it automatic writing. This feels very much that way.

Love this, aurally and conceptually:

the tart taste
the slight shape

[ChemicalMadness]

Thanks, sylvie. So glad you enjoyed....

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I suppose it is always a balancing act when it comes to matters of the heart. If we constantly seek perfection, we will always be disappointed, but if we "settle" for less than what the heart truly wants, we will never be complete...and interesting juxtaposition. I guess the point is to "know thyself"...

This was nicely done in your unique style. I'm glad you're posting again, I've missed the unusual beats of your off-color melodies; sign of a fan.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thanks, GF. It's been a long couple of weeks....i hope to be around more frequently....

[Horizon K.]

trying to find those perfect spaces in between... but some distances cannot be reached across, no longer... so much loss and sadness in your words. Very beautifully done.

[ChemicalMadness]

Thank you so much!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my, C.M.---

you wrote me and my first wife here....we met in college back in '71...our hippie days...

and our relationship was so similar to this...like a storm, which was exciting at the same time causing irreperable damage that would cause it to turn to dust.

this is so well worded...it just reminds me..and much of that time was so good and much of that relationship was so good...

so much more than just pain relived through your words.

thank you for this.

jacob

[ChemicalMadness]

No, thank you! It gets no better than what you have given here...im so glad you connected. Thank you for your kind words.