I'm falling.

I'm falling,

off the edge of a cliff..

 

The air rushes within my hair.

 

The ground growing closer.

 

I hope this is not the real me.

But I don't know anymore.

I've lost sight of who I am.

 

My life flashing before me.

Memories bringing tears of joy and regret.

 

Is this the end of me?

Is this really what I've become?

A suicide attempt in action?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Cerise]

aw..its very touching..the way the suspense is out in the last line...teh whole process..very well written..i specially liked the way all the memories cum together and tears of joy r overflowing...very nicely described..

[B.T. Sixx]

This ain't the real you Chesney, I promise:)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Excellent read and write. Reminds of the time when I was about to fall, but the noose was too long or the ceiling was too low.

[Michael Bujtas]

The poem sort of tells a story escalating from falling off a cliff to suicide, which is cool. I feel like it could go into more detail as well, you know? Maybe be more specific with the pain that's haunting you, go into specifics perhaps as to why you wrote the poem. Otherwise, it was a good read.

[Chesney W.]

thanx for the review...ill take all of that information into consideration1 :)

[Cameron]

Brilliant poem, and no this is only the beginning, I'll catch you :).

[Chesney W.]

awwwww:) Cameron you're too sweet:) ily!!

[Tom]

I like what you have tried to do with this poem, the idea is very interesting. My only criticism is that the imagery is a little cliché, in that air in hair, life flashing and memories bringing tears have been well used. Having said this I like the way you have distributed the lines to create drama within the poem and it feels to me as if time is slowing as the author falls, as if the final verse allows the realisation of what is happening before the impact.

[Acropolix]

Interesting how the poem develops in drama. Certainly makes you think of the problems the person is experiencing. Though I do not understand one thing in the poem. You state there are tears of joy, which is a rather weird emotion within the poem's setting, but that might just be a personal comment. You did a good job with this one!