Empty Hole

Empty Hole

A Poem by FrikinFrancesca

I heard a song and it made sense to me, it really hit home and this poem and focused around how I feel about certain things along with the emotion of the song.

My heart isn't here anymore.
Can you see the hole in my chest?
The place where something should be.

I think it shattered,
I think it broke.
Maybe it disappeared,
If you choose to peer,
You'll see the reasons why.

Something happened,
Something you can't erase
or forget.
This unforgettable memory, fresh in my mind.
It caused the collapse.
It's what caused the void.
Do you see it now?
The reasons behind it?
I'm fueled by what it use to be,
Now it's gone, empty and abandoned.

Can you feel my heart beating?
Can you feel my pulse?
No, you can't.
It's obvious isn't it?
You took the missing piece with you.
The thing that will complete the hole in my chest.
I wonder if I'll ever feel that warm feeling again.
It's to late though.
My hearts not beating.
It's not even there no more.
It dried out.
It died.

© 2009 FrikinFrancesca

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems. :l
Also, if it doesn't sound very good, I kind of rushed through it, so sorry.

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You can definitely tell this poem was based around a song. The rhythm and pace of it almost makes the poem seems like lyrics.

Brilliant imagery and emotion runs through this piece-you should be proud of it. Anyone who has suffered a broken heart can relate, and it's always good for poetry to be able to reach other people and grab their attention and emotions. You've definitely done it with this piece; thoroughly enjoyed it!

Posted 14 Years Ago

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This so wonderful!! I’m legit crying because it reminded me of something someone.... its so beautiful and I love it!!!!

Posted 3 Years Ago

I've thought about being heartbroken, but I've never thought of it as being missing. So that was interesting. Also created something based off of how a song made you feel is neat. I like that you're sharing actual feelings. I'd like to hear that song if you would include it. It didn't seem rushed to me. Great job.

Posted 4 Years Ago

a lot of emotions that i am sure many can relate to. good job

Posted 4 Years Ago

No, don't be sorry, it's 100% better than most of mine, I really like it. I feel what you're saying.

Posted 5 Years Ago

I like it makes me think back on some things that happened in my life and made me feel empty. Great writting, keep it up

Posted 7 Years Ago

This poem has evoked some personl feelings too.Even though there is no much feeling of continuation in between, it still managed to make me read the entire poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago

The emotion throughout this poem is beautiful.

Posted 7 Years Ago

I actually love he idea that you based this off a song you heard, such beautiful art you've created! Such a sad, longing feeling when you feel so empty after someone left...constantly asking yourself if you're still alive, or why. We can't live based on how others may leave us, we can only grow. It takes a lot of time to put yourself back together sometimes...it took me a long time to allow myself to be okay with feeling how I do sometimes...I enjoyed the sad, desperate feelings you conveyed. Lovely write!

Posted 7 Years Ago

I like the the overall idea which you presented in this poem. There is a lot of expression within this piece which is truly memorizing.

Posted 7 Years Ago

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30 Reviews
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Added on December 22, 2009
Last Updated on December 23, 2009
Tags: Empty, Hole, Personal, Poem, Poetry, Music, Love, Heart broken, People, Dark
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