A Poem by Choco

I feel like Im stuck in the middle of a hurricane

Lighting flashing, thunder sounding, pouring rain

A long long walk in the storming weather

So far to go with no protection, no umbrella

Im going in the right direction, with no destination

Guess Im looseing my step, losing my motivation

Im not alone but I cant feel their presence

We're drifting apart, will I ever learn my lesson

The days are getting shorter, da nights re getting colder

The years are going faster, Im rapidly getting older

Is the storm almost over are am I entering the eye

Im feeling sea sick as my life dips and rise

I feel like I can make it with God on my side

This hurricane cant distroy me so Ill just man up and enjoy the ride

© 2008 Choco

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Arthur speaks to my sentiment!
This is very well done!

Thank you for sharing your talent in my contest!

Posted 14 Years Ago

Oh this is excellent.. Your words are artistically put together and the essence of the scribe is empowering to the soul. I really enjoyed every line!

Posted 14 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely done. The hurricane is a powerful metaphor and you've described it well. I think our language is very similar when we write.

"We're drifiting apart. Will I ever learn my lesson" -- who is we and what lesson will you never or ever learn?

Posted 14 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on November 9, 2008
Last Updated on November 9, 2008



Dallas, TX

Im Choco, Ive always like to write; poetry, short stories, whatever. Some people have told me that I have talent but what does that mean right, they're my friends. Anyway I would apreciate any feedbac.. more..

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