A Dual Personality Conjoined Inside

A Dual Personality Conjoined Inside

All the words in all the world

Will never explain the way you were

You can’t explain the how’s or why’s

The destruction that you left behind

You change like the weather, bad to worse

The words you say are they yours or hers

Your points of view just turn around

Just like your smile turns to a frown

I thought you’d fucked me up forever

But now I’m back, I’m better than ever

I’m going to live my life the way

The way it was before you came

You’ll never break me, go on and try

I’m standing stronger than both your minds

Your dual personality conjoined inside

I hope there’s room for both your sides

Still I hope you’re happy together

There’s a side I love and will forever

Your other side I can’t abide

She’s everything you weren’t inside

So cunning with her vicious lies

You change so quick you're like the tide

I tried so hard to help you find

The real you, you left behind

An impossible task it came to be

Like moving a mountain or draining the sea

Now I see through all your lies

It’s made me stop n realise

Your foolish pride was your own demise

You're everything you once despised

You’ve only got your self too blame

The life we had you threw away.

By Chris Atkinson

Reviews

[E. A. Lide]

"You’ll never brake me, go on and try"- brake should be break
"You change so quick your like the tide"- your should be you're
"It’s made me stop n realise"- I'm not sure if the n is a stylistic choice or not. If it is, it should be 'n. If that was not done on purpose, you should change it to and.
"Your everything you once despised"- your should be you're

Other than those little easy to fix grammar/spelling mistakes, this poem is near flawless. I liked the way it flowed and the voice it held. Sometimes voice and sense are lost in rhyming poetry, but not in this piece. Keep it up!

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you very much for the review, much apriciated E.A. Lide. Thanks for noticing the grammar errors aswel, I will fix them now :)

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Sounds like you've been through it, experienced some pain, and that poetry in raw form is my favorite. The girl sounds bipolar, by the way.

[MagicAl]

I thoroughly enjoyed this.. can feel your hurt through each stanza, full of hate for the situation, but a deep routed love inside. It's hard to let go of something that's passed, so glad it's made you stronger.. great write.. :)

[John Anderson]

Dude, it's spelled "Dual"/ LOL. good poem

[Chris Atkinson]

haha thanks mate, I write things in one go that quickly some times I miss spell ha. Thanks for the review mate, much apriciated

[Dark Poet]

I REALLY liked this. There are just those certain poems that sing to you, and oddly enough i was actually singing this as i read it. I know that sounds strange but i feel like theyre lyrics also. Beautiful job!

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you very much for your kind review, I realy apriciate it and I am glad you enjoyed it. I thought the same as I was writing it strangely enough. Realy glad you enjoyed it, thanks again

[sonnie ibadah]

"I tried so hard to help you find
The real you, you left behind
An impossible task it came to be
Like moving a mountain or draining the sea..." this is so touching, it shows how much you loved her and were willing to go beyond yourself just to save her. the pain for her loss must have been unbearable, i feel for you man...

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you very much for your kind words and review Sonnie, I realy apriciate it. Yes it broke my heart, I loved her and always will but I'm sure some good will eventualy come from it. Life has a funny way of working itself out eventualy. She is the best girl ive ever known but her other side turned into everything she wasn't. thanks again for your kind words Sonnie

[FireFox9]

Unfortunately this is true and people can change to this degree. It's harsh and saddening but it's true. Fox-

[Chris Atkinson]

Yes its heart braking and your right it does happen. I just wish it hadn't happened with this girl. Thanks for your review, they are always apriciated :)

[Pure Innocence]

After reading your story I can see how painful it must of been to watch her go :(

[Chris Atkinson]

Thank you for your kind rewiew, yes it was hert braking and a love lost but thats life sometimes and I'm sure it will work out and some good will eventualy come from it. the bad times always lead to the good x

[Pure Innocence]

So true, and some great words of wisdom right there.

[Pax]

Oh, I thought this piece was an internat struggle about how our mind thinking in duality. Great way to expressed a relationship gone dead. Like life, everything comes with a choice and that choice defines our journey. Perhaps all went badly in the past, if its not meant to be, then there must be other someone that would filled the void of the heart. Very well expressed piece.

[Chris Atkinson]

Thanks for your kind words and reveiw pax, I totaly agree. Its very much apriciated