Soul Mates

Soul Mates

A Poem by Chris Atkinson

Soul Mates
My love for you is a melody
If I lost my sight I still could see
As love is blind, you’re my symphony
Of love of life and good memories

Your smiles a Gift not only to me
But to the world for all to see
An eternal love that will never die
Like the sun, the moon a star lit sky

I know that in life times do get hard
The death of a loved one is a scar to the heart
I feeling of loss that will never depart
But her memory lives on in all of our hearts

Just know this my angel, I will always be here
To fix your heart to help you heal
To make you feel the joys again 
Of life and hope to ease your pain
The love we have will never fail 
Never die and never frail

Life is short, loves is a gift
The pasts the past, we should never wait
To say the things we know we feel inside
I’ll be here for you always till the end of time 
                                

I’ll always make you feel better inside
I’ll show you a love most will never find
To you my angel I promise blind 
I will always be here by your side
By Chris Atkinson

© 2014 Chris Atkinson


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Overall a good poem. A couple of comments on the structure:
Should you try to cut the fourth stanza down to four lines like the rest of the poem? Seems somewhat dis-jointed with the two additional lines.
Third stanza, third line: Should "I feeling" be I'm feeling or A feeling?
The general rhyme scheme is good but the fifth stanza doesn't stick to the pattern, and in some stanzas the end rhymes don't follow the line pattern. If that is intentional as a technique, then maybe try to find a pattern within that. If not, then possibly try to make the rhyme pattern consistent throughout.
Again, a good poem with a good flow. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Atkinson

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the review and advice Rick



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It has been rightly said " Love is that condition in which the happiness of another person is essential to your own." so justifies your words author.. Very well written..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Atkinson

9 Years Ago

thank you for your rewiew Gurleen, much apriciated
Gurleen Saluja

9 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
Awl...you are making me want a friend like that. One that promises to always be there.

Just know this my angel, I will always be here
To fix your heart to help you heal
To make you feel the joys again
Of life and hope to ease your pain
The love we have will never fail
Never die and never frail

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Atkinson

9 Years Ago

thank you very much for your review Brianna. Its just my opinion, but for me when you love someone .. read more
Awe so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeet! I browsed through your stuff. A gifted writer you are.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Atkinson

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much, I realy apriciate your words
Being with a soul mate is not like being in an average relationship, love does not die, the connection goes beyond physicality. An heartfelt poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Atkinson

9 Years Ago

I totaly agree Ambra, its an eternal love and two conjoined souls. Thank you very much for your revi.. read more
Chris Atkinson

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much for your kind words and review, its greatly apriciated.
"Just know this my angel, I will always be here
To fix your heart to help you heal
To make you feel the joys again
Of life and hope to ease your pain....." they say that when someone is willing to go beyond all bounds to make you happy, that's when you know you're loved. You expressed that beautifully, nice write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Chris Atkinson
Chris Atkinson

Sunderland, Tyne and Wear, United Kingdom



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Hi My name is Chris, I'm 28 years old and from Sunderland, Tyne and Wear, UK. I love music, Glastonbury festival, poetry, writing, films, books and much more. I have the best friends a person c.. more..

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