6wrd

Elapsing, integration of lovers trend collected

Reviews

[Erin]

Six word stories are the best. I kind of think that you were going off of what Hemingway was trying to do, but you didn't capture the entire point of his message. We don't understand really why he created his six word story, but we understand that the point of it was to get the reader thinking about what the entire story is about. You kinda captured that, but it's not to that WOW level yet. I don't blame you. There aren't that many people in the world who can actually do that. But it's really good. Good placement of the comma. Good job.
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[Phasiandae]

Very powerful for such a small verse.

Interesting flow, very well done.