blind

blind

A Poem by Daniel Atkinson
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necessary depression.

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i'm looking at the world
through a pair of you-colored glasses,
and everything's gray.

only that's not the best way to describe it.
more like a wretched-smokey-nothingness
choking-me-on-its-sour-dejection
kind of color,
but gray is so much more simple.

i hate the way this feels,
my stomach of butterflies turned to bats,
so you can't call me a masochist.
but without these you-colored glasses,
i'd be so...
blind.

© 2011 Daniel Atkinson


Author's Note

Daniel Atkinson
A bad relationship that I went through. As horrible as it was, I found it impossible to leave her.

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Love is indeed the poison that keeps us alive. But it is only when we let go of that poison do we die, only to be saved by another vial. Thus the course continues until one is content with the toxicity of their romance.

Yea, I really liked your poem. I've been in a relationship like that. But eventually you left her right?

Posted 13 Years Ago


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A stomach full of butterflies turned to bats... what a deliciously nauseating image. And it fit so well in the gray world you painted. Love this.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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powerful stuff. wow. describes that "you or nothing" state of being. perfectly casptured- just the right length, i think.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I don't want to love it, but you're writing is so wonderful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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My god, this is amazing. I love teh description of the color. It's gorgeous and tragic, yet excellent.

A+ my friend.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I think this does a prety good job of capturing how a person can be dependent on a relationship they know is bad. I do wish it was longer, though.


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Added on April 6, 2011
Last Updated on May 16, 2011
Tags: depression, relationships, love, hopelessness, gray

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Daniel Atkinson
Daniel Atkinson

DULUTH, GA



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