pessimist's hell

pessimist's hell

A Poem by Daniel Atkinson
"

almost paradise.

"

sun-swords and their respective sun-warriors

hack away at the ogreish clouds.

among the towering daisies

flowering into their artful form,

we smile a little too deliberately.

 

the clocktower strikes thirteen.

before the day is through,

we will have faded.

© 2011 Daniel Atkinson


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Daniel Atkinson
I literally just wrote this one. I'm sitting in the computer lab in Chemistry. Couldn't get it out of my head.

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Woah, very short but very good. I like how the 2nd stanza is a pardox of the 1st.
You captured pessimism perfectly with just a few lines.

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it's cool. i don't get stuff like THAT stuck in my head. pure talent.

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Added on April 14, 2011
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Daniel Atkinson
Daniel Atkinson

Atlanta, GA



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