beard

beard

A Poem by Daniel Atkinson

i need to shave.
i am bristly and
scraggly.

but if i
pick up a razor
i will slit my wrists
and bleed
into the sewers.

i guess for now
i will remain
a weeping
bearded poet.

© 2011 Daniel Atkinson


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I wish I hadn't already read so many poems about cutting on WC. That kind of kept it from having the full effect, because I think a part of my brain now shuts off when I read the word "razor" and I skim through the rest on autopilot. I don't mean to bash other poets; I just feel like it's over-addressed. I wish all poems involving cutting and razors could be this touching. The opening and closing stanzas really give this its own distinct story.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wonderfully put together, the ending is my absolute favourite. "I guess for now i will remain a weeping bearded poet." There is something about beards that just seems to make the owner of it such a deeper person. Great work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I wish I hadn't already read so many poems about cutting on WC. That kind of kept it from having the full effect, because I think a part of my brain now shuts off when I read the word "razor" and I skim through the rest on autopilot. I don't mean to bash other poets; I just feel like it's over-addressed. I wish all poems involving cutting and razors could be this touching. The opening and closing stanzas really give this its own distinct story.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yeah, I have to agree. You took an "emo" concept and turned it into something manly.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You really say a lot with very few words.
These words are emotionally biting. I literally felt a pang in my chest while reading this. You have quite a gift.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Daniel Atkinson
Daniel Atkinson

DULUTH, GA



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