Im sorry

An idiot

Im sorry

But it must be done

The pain is just to large for one man to take

Im tired

So very tired

Of everybody

And everything

I shall so let the blood flow free

And let these demons

Finally take me

I know , once its all said  and done

You will hate me

For leaving you here

All alone

My death will set everyone free

My death  will be just one more

Among thousands

Im sorry

Reviews

[Julio Cesar Ruiz]

Hey man, I see what you mean when you said that all you write is dark stuff. I know its hard to fight when you're feeling like this but push through it. because it'll only get better.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Oh heartbreak.. it does hurt! Huge emotions coming through your writing... such deep and troubled words.. which of course I hope you do not mean.... but we all have these low periods where we evaluate ourselves and feel like a number.. what is our true purpose??? Once or twice I have felt what you have written here and then I think wait a minute.. I am not a number.. this other person will not make me feel this! Your ending :

You will hate me

For leaving you here

All alone

My death will set everyone free

My death will be just one more

Among thousands

Im sorry


Sounds like you would like to leave the world and make the other feel a pain like you feel.. the problem is they probably wouldn't if they don't love you on the same level.. it would be chalked up to the other side thinking.. "wow they had real problems".. "it's a good thing I got out before they hurt me". Take all that written energy.. love yourself and find someone worthy of your deep love!

[E-man]

so like suicide right? its pretty good but not as strong in description maybe some puntuation will make it flow smoother.. i know i dont do that but yeah i should get on that also