Ocean

Mouth filled now with salty air

Entering your nose

Mysterious Ocean's hair

Wisps as all forgoes

Forgetting past and all to come

Shocking at it's core

Waves roll in with muted hum

Joy mixed in with lore

Creating hurt; joy and despair

Agonizing blind

Allow broken to repair

Procuring new mind

Leave the Ocean, walk away

For greater views to find one day

Reviews

[Criss ;)]

This is a well piece, i can figure it out from here....i love this piece, "OCEAN"....an appropriate tittle...!!
well penned, well expressed n well written :)
you know what i think you dropped here the depth of "OCEAN"...if id a suggestion then i wanna say that you should have to write more...you should have to continue this beautiful piece...Add few more lines, i'd like to read.....:)

By the way, i loved this startin' phrase
Mouth filled now with salty air
Entering your nose
Mysterious Ocean's hair
Wisps as all forgoes.....!!

you made me cold by your thoughts because yet, i'm on my bed outside the room, n gettin' cold air...waves're still flutterin' me...n in this time i read your this piece that's on ocean....n believe mei', not feelin' that i'm runnin' over an ocean....n gettin' coldness's of ocean..hahahah.....

very nice write...
nice flow of ink :)
Have this :93.9/100
Have a nice writin'

TAKE CARE...!!

[Courtney]

Thank you so much! That means so much time. :)