Whisper To Me Softly

Whisper to me softly,
As the winds guide our sail.
We belong together,
This love shall prevail.

Whisper to me softly,
As our dreams take flight.
They will never break us down,
For this love is so right.

Whisper to me softly,
While fear invades our dreams.
They are gaining on us now.
Picking us apart at the seams.
Did you whisper to me softly,
The night you said goodbye?

Please, whisper to me softly now,
In this dark room where I watched you die.

Whisper to me softly,
It was all just a nightmare.
Kiss me once so gently,
Let me feel your breath behind my ear.
Whisper to me softly,
Tell me you are here.

Reviews

[Gee]

Some places feels a bit forced as if grasping for a word to rhyme with another, as often happens, as I do it myself. Apart from that an enjoyable read.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Yes i agree with Jacob,
thanks for this lovely piece of work and entry into my poetry comp
I am not good at reviews not good at English just love to write
Absolutely love the last verse.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not so much a rhyme fan..but you do it naturally and there is a good feel to this piece.
j.

[Tony]

Nice write Resa! I loved the flow! I noticed the last ‘hear’ should be ‘here’ but great job!

[Resa]

Thank you Tony!
Sometimes I notice things like that in the work of others.
I’m afraid to mention it, as I might offend them.
I appreciate that you let me know.
Perhaps I should start letting people know :) especially my friends! LOL

[Tony]

I hope I didn’t offend you but I personally would like to know rather than having it stay like that for everyone to see. Because if I notice it later then I’m mad at myself for messing up.