Lust Lost Love

As she sits against the door as he walks away she realizes that he is the best thing that has ever happened to her. 

He was everything she ever dreamed and their

 love was so strong that the thickest thing couldn’t come between 

and try to tear their love apart, she sat there, cried and thought about the days

he made her smile or the days that they chose baby names for their make believe child.

 She knew she would do nothing to hurt him but couldn’t make that promise. He never swore, always loved and was completely honest.

She couldn't fight the tears that fell on her face

 or the ache in her heart that she couldn't erase 

She made her bed which consisted of lies

 and now she is left with a complete stranger that she despises 

and a kid within her that is his. 

But she wants it to be HIS

... not that one, but the one that she loved. 

The one she cheated on the one that never abused her. 

The one that never touched her in a way she didn’t like. 

The one who comforted her though the sleepless nights. 

The one who held her and told her it would be alright

 and he would be there forever, and never leave her sight  

Until the end of time. 

But she assumes her time is up because he is walking out of the door. 

She says silently I want you back, I need you more than ever before.

 But he couldn’t hear her silent words through the black cold door.

 The door that resembled his heart. 

The door that would forever separate them, that would forever keep them apart.

 Him sitting on the other side, sitting Indian style asking the lord why. His tears ran longer than the limitless shore, he pounded his heavy fist on the door and fell back as he reminisced kissing her sweet lips that resembled a Hershey’s kiss. No other woman in the world could ever replace her. The world’s biggest eraser couldn't erase her. A good man affected, rejected and disrespected all because he LOST his LOVE to LUST. 

-Bre'Ana Gates

Reviews

[FineFrenzy]

A little difficult to read, because of the formatting, but very nicely done.

A powerful story, even if short. Perhaps that's what made it so. If you would have added either more details, or just more, perhaps to the point of them being too many, it would have lost its essence.

Keep on writing, sweetie, you can only get better.

[Cre8tive]

Changed the format. Hope It Is Better!

[dreaming dame]

Wow, great write. Wonderfull choice of words. :)
I just noticed that at one point, I think you wrote
though instead of through.:)

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you ought to break this up into stanza's it would read alot better.
Like it though, just hard to read. You did a splendid job.