Alone

I feel alone

As if I where

On a lonely darkend street

The wind it brushes against me

While the tall buildings they laugh at me

I feel alone and faint

Please do come and help

I feel like a dog without their master

Like a book without letters

Like an oyster without its pearl

Please go rescue me

I have scars which can not be seen

For they are deep inside me

My heart was broken to many times

And my soul felt lonely for too much time

Author's Note

Hope u like it! It expresses my inner feelings. When I started going to school.

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

It's always scary and lonely when entering a new situation...usually temporary.
Good use of similes Katerina...and imagery was spot on
It was an excellent way to depict loneliness, we could all understand and feel.
I know from whence you speak...as I'm sure everyone does...
See "Alone in Thought" if you care to...
I loved the line or maybe the word "I feel alone and "faint"...a great way to describe loneliness....faint
One grammar issue....or typo...'To' to 'too' in "to many times" unless you used (my heart was broken into many parts)...but who am I to say
Excellent write Katerina
allen

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Thanks! I appreciate ur review! And I'll fix that typo, tnx again!

[Shesentangels]

Good writing, sad but shows hope!! I like the part about your heart being broken:( remember, you can only learn to love of your felt heartbreak.

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Thanks! :)

[Sharon]

I know this feeling. This poem is sad and sweet at the same time. I can relate with the last paragraph! Nice poem! :)

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Tnx! I really appreciate it! ^.^ Glad u liked it!

[Sharon]

It's great!!!

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:D

[Booklover200014]

This is a really great poem, kind of reminds me of my own feelings when I'm at school. :)

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Tnx, it's actually based on my feelings at school ^.^

[Death Girl]

Wow I like this but what do you mean by when you started going to school. Were you like home schooled for a while or something. Well anyways I like this piece good write..

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Tnx, I'm really glad u liked it. I wasn't home schooled though, it was at the beginning of 5th grade, wasn't one of my best years.

[Krithika Raghavan]

When you started going to school, interesting. I've always thought only the school noice and commotion can turn on my poetic senses;-)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I feel that this is a lovely moving piece, you write so well, Katerina, well done

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Thank u so much! :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

it is my pleasure

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Wow ! It's pretty intense and spendidely written !
You definitely don't need many words to create pathos, that's great !
Wanna read more poems of yours ! Espero pelos proximos :)

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Thanks, I'm so glad u enjoyed it! I promise to post some more soon :)

[Patrick Henry]

You have an amazing way of describing your emotive responses and senses around you without borrowing the usual boring words that others may use when they can't express themselves proper. Gorgeous yet tragic, and beautifully introspective, but you are quite aware and with an incredible wit about you to understand the dynamics and roller coaster moods that we all share at one time or another!! This is, yet, another beautiful little write by you, and I'm impressed that you are of a callow age, but possess a gorgeous heart that proves to be quite fun to watch and tell a story of any kind...... Beautiful Katerina. xoxo -Your Mark

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Thanks, I'm glad u liked my way of describing my pain :) Tnx again!

[Patrick Henry]

Did I go too far...... in describing your "pain"? I just really appreciated the way you wrote this and can't wait to see more of it!! xoxo -Mark

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No, it ok, I love it when people describe how they liked my poems, I really apreciate it!