Holding onto Tonight

Holding onto Tonight

A Poem by DACAC

Tired.

Tired.

Hungry.

 Miserable.

These are words that describe my life and me.

I’m tired, almost all of the time.

I`m so hungry I would eat a rat

I’m miserable because I’m always tired and hungry.

 

My parents don’t care.

They don’t even notice that I’ve lost almost 20 pounds

in the past six months because I haven’t eaten anything except the small school lunches I get during the day.

Is this how everyone lives?

Because if other people’s lives are ANY better than mine

 

I want that life.

 I have parents, who don’t care about me

I want them to care

 

I’m holding onto tonight

Tonight’s when it will all be over

When I’ll finally be done being hungry

I won’t suffer any more

 

Holding…

Onto…

Tonight..

 

El Fin

© 2015 DACAC


Author's Note

DACAC
This is all completely fiction. This has nothing to do with me.
Please leave feedback! I want to make my writing better.

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good poem. As I read I felt a little bit off when reading the first section. I would have put in something about why you aren't eating. Instead of "I`m hungry to the point I would eat a rat" I think "I`m so hungry I would eat a rat" sounds a little smoother. Other than that, it's a sad message but it is well written.

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Posted 9 Years Ago


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9 Years Ago

Thank you! I changed it because I read it over and you're right, it did sound smoother. Thank you fo.. read more

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