Shimmer

Shimmer

A Poem by D Connolly
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A shimmer in the road provokes an imaginative response

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I saw a shimmer in the road

What it was I didn't know

It was round and flat, shiny blue and green

I had to look

It could be anything!

Did someone lose a necklace?

Wouldn't that be funny?

I could take it to the pawn shop

To make some quick money

Or maybe its a dragon scale

That fell out of the sky!

I must have missed the great beast

As he soared gracefully by

It could be an amulet

That transports you to another world

Where magic is the realest thing

And there's castles made of pearl

OOOH!  What if it's an alien ship

Crash landed from outer space?

With tiny vicious beings

Sent to destroy the human race

Or, maybe it's a compass

But not with normal mechanics

Instead of pointing North and South

It locates moons and planets!

What if it is full of life

Like a small primordial pool?

Where awesome creatures are forming

That would be so cool!!

When I got close enough to see what it was

I had to laugh and that's because

It seems the shimmer in the road

Was a bunch of flies

Eating a toad

© 2016 D Connolly


Author's Note

D Connolly
True story. This is how my brain works, guys.

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LOL. I love this poem...and I love how your mind works. I've often told my brother that we don't think alike. He thinks like a rifle shot...straight to the point...direct. I'm a shotgun blast. I'm just all over the place...all the what if's...all the possibilities. I think you're a shotgun too! Great poem. Thank you for the post.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

Thank-you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it



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This is top notch in my book. Most importantly it's very imaginative with so much variety & so original. But I also feel your rhyme & rhythm are solid & contributing to the sensation of bee-bopping down the road. I feel you should not apologize or even make a big deal out of the way your brain works, becuz it almost sounds disingenuous, pretend modesty, when your poem is this good. Besides, I comment all the time in my reviews that writers need to get way outside the predictable cliché dots, which is exactly what you're doing here. Don't give me this crap about "just how my brain works." Own your excellence & teach it to others who are stuck in the humdrums of writing obscurity (((HUGS)))

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

Thanks Barley! That's sweet; I won't apologize anymore! I'm smiling so big, I just don't know what.. read more
Nice one. You deserved that diamond necklace.
Still, could have been worse, you might have been the toad.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

very true! thank-you for the review!
Lol, you got a humorous way of writing... Superb... Lately I have been reading works that have the funny twist in the end and yours is spot on man... Don't let your head work any different way than this, we are losing humour from life, and it's a blessing to keep it up with life... Great job.. .

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

Thank-you very much! I love to keep it light when I can. I'm glad that you enjoyed it
Alright jokester,often times I encourage new ,young or even unsure writers that their imagination is one of their strongest tools in their tool box and the things that it can create are limitless. Then I stumble upon your poem and I said to myself " You see? Now this is exactly what I've been talking about !" Strategically placed rhyming words wrapped an a blanket if imagination can be inspired by the most mundane of things/events. You've proven my point with this write. It was great fun to read it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

Thank-you!
LOL. I love this poem...and I love how your mind works. I've often told my brother that we don't think alike. He thinks like a rifle shot...straight to the point...direct. I'm a shotgun blast. I'm just all over the place...all the what if's...all the possibilities. I think you're a shotgun too! Great poem. Thank you for the post.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

Thank-you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it
Good on the flies, eating the alien toad king and saving the planet :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

LOL alien toad king. Glad you liked it. Thank you for the review
Lorry

7 Years Ago

No worries :)
oh my i have had similar experience...

roadkill becomes fantasy kill!

maybe they were alien flies?

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

I'm SO glad you liked it!
I enjoyed this ale and I liked the ending.
"When I got close enough to see what it was
I had to laugh and that's because
It seems the shimmer in the road
Was a bunch of flies
Eating a toad"
The above lines. A perfect ending to the story. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

THANK-YOU Coyote!
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
Funny tale. Pays to keep our eyes open to all around us. Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

glad you thought it was funny!
amazingg job
I loved the poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

7 Years Ago

thank-you I hope it made you smile

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