4:30 pm

4:30 pm

A Poem by D Connolly
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finally relaxing after a day at work

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the dogs rough and tumbled
in the yard
like so many deadlines and rushed solutions
and I laid in the grass
watching a cloud
dissipate

© 2020 D Connolly


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Nice to see you again Dani. I well remember those days as a boy lying down on the grass staring up at the clouds looking for shapes and thinking I'd better hold on before I fall off.
Those were simpler days...if I did that now, the men with the white coats may come and cart me away.

Still, when I go to the sea I'll have ample time to stare at clouds.

A good write Dani.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

9 Months Ago

Hi Ted! I spent the winter thinking of my priorities and I decided that looking at clouds was on the.. read more



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You got your priorities right. I liked this bit of brevity. Let the world drift by as you gaze into the clouds for a few minutes peace and quiet. It makes much sense. We need to relax as well as work hard.
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Chris

Posted 9 Months Ago


Sometimes we have to let go and lay in the grass and watch the clouds go by.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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I thought you'd become a nun and taken a vow of silence too.
Welcome back, enjoyed the read. Have spent many a happy hour watching clouds float past.


Posted 9 Months Ago


The dogs rough and tumbled in the yard

I loved this line! It’s so full of the zest of life! For me the clouds of stress evaporated reading this. And the cats went cartwheeling too

Posted 9 Months Ago


A womans work is never done, cos they're dissipating in the clouds.
Get back to work you lazy sod. Where have you been anyway, missed your lazy ways.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

9 Months Ago

Hi Paul! Been taking a little time to seclude and rest. Spring is coming! Time to shake the dust off.. read more
Paul Bell

9 Months Ago

Nice one, Dani.
There is nothing better then to let all the stress and worry about work life just dissipate with the clouds and just simply enjoy the present moment - enjoy!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

9 Months Ago

Thanks Carolynn!
Nice to see you again Dani. I well remember those days as a boy lying down on the grass staring up at the clouds looking for shapes and thinking I'd better hold on before I fall off.
Those were simpler days...if I did that now, the men with the white coats may come and cart me away.

Still, when I go to the sea I'll have ample time to stare at clouds.

A good write Dani.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

9 Months Ago

Hi Ted! I spent the winter thinking of my priorities and I decided that looking at clouds was on the.. read more
There's something about lying in the grass with the dogs that whisks away all that frenzy of the day! You've captured it perfectly & the cloud dissipating is a powerful, tho peaceful ending image-speak! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D Connolly

9 Months Ago

thanks so much Margie! I hope you're well in the West
barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Kinda hooked on the 75* afternoons & puttering in the garden, trying to pull it together again, litt.. read more
The dissipating cloud is a symbol of the speaker himself, after a stressful day at work. Reminds me of why I'm so glad I'm retired.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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D Connolly

9 Months Ago

oh man, I can't wait! thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts John the Baptist
the cloud off our shoulder as another work day ends, and we get to enjoy the company of those with whom we really want to be...the ones that add so much sunshine to our existence.
j.

Posted 9 Months Ago


D Connolly

9 Months Ago

absolutely. Thanks for reading Jacob

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