TRAPPED

Hello......

Hello.....

As I try to move I feel nothing but walls

It seems my eyes are closed but I know there open

I can't see anything...

Am I lost

Alone

Someone please come to my rescue

This seems familiar

I've been here before

Everytime I find Happiness, Joy, and a Steady base

They come and trap me

Why  must you put me somewhere you know I can't escape

Is this a joke

No

Let me stop

I need to grow up

Take responsiblities

There is no one but me

Why

Why must I run

I'm perfect...someone can love me

When someone loves me

Why should I Trap myself and blame others

Its time to take a stand

Im a new me

Im no longer trapped

Im a great brown skin woman to be

Reviews

[Wharton]

I'd maybe work on punctuation like in your contractions where you don't use any. There is a typo here and there but those are fixable things.

The poem has that feeling of being trapped and seeking a way out, with hands, voice, whatever method it takes. The questions in the poem seem to be rhetorical for I have a feeling the answers are known, since later they are answered when the poem speaks of needing to take responsibility.

I think I'd put an "ed" on "skin" in the last line, divide noone into two words, capitalize the stray "i" etc.

But the poems strength for me was in its affirmation at the end: the knowledge if who you the speaker can be.