Going to Coventry

Going to Coventry

A Poem by Daniel Eaves
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A short poem about life traps

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As I was going to Coventry

 I met a man upon his knees

 Who cursed the skies ferociously:

“By God, I wish I wasn’t me!”

 

To Coventry though I was bound

I paused to pick him off the ground,

I shook his shoulders, slapped him round -

His predicament seemed that profound.

 

“Why’d you wish you weren’t yourself?”

“Cos I’m the kind of low-down elf

 That spends his life upon the shelf

 Wishing that he weren’t himself.”

 

I wandered on, head wrapt in thought,

And wondered what I’d just been taught.

I pondered that each life is fraught

With traps in which the soul is caught.

© 2013 Daniel Eaves


Author's Note

Daniel Eaves
I said I didn't often mess with full rhymes, so to contradict myself I dragged another rhymer out. What do you think?

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Excellent rhyme and meter, with fine reading cadence (except for the last line of the second stanza). Using the same rhymes for an entire stanza usually results in some lines that sound forced. None of your do; all of them fit and add to the narrative. I think you should "mess with full rhymes" more often. You do it so well.

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Daniel Eaves

7 Years Ago

Thanks richom. You're perfectly right about the last line of the second stanza, but I thought "what .. read more



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sounds like we all have free choice and we don't have to be a prisoner of our own making. we could change. good reminder to ourselves. great job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent rhyme and meter, with fine reading cadence (except for the last line of the second stanza). Using the same rhymes for an entire stanza usually results in some lines that sound forced. None of your do; all of them fit and add to the narrative. I think you should "mess with full rhymes" more often. You do it so well.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daniel Eaves

7 Years Ago

Thanks richom. You're perfectly right about the last line of the second stanza, but I thought "what .. read more
Enjoyed your words and subtlety of the message and imagery...nice flow and rhythm...Rose


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Daniel Eaves

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words, Rose. I'm sincerely glad you enjoyed it.
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A lot of wisdom in your words. The last two lines were great...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daniel Eaves

7 Years Ago

Thank you, Sami. I'm glad such a gifted wordsmith as yourself enjoys my work.
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

I do. You are welcome...:)

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