Blood Lust

A poem about a vampires hunger for blood.

My dark obsession

Has made me

Give up my every possession

 

My only will

May chill others

Because my thirst

 Drives me to kill

 

I must fight my dark need

My Bloody greed

It is the blood I must drink

Very morbid you must think

 

I must kill

It is such an awful thrill

It is against my better will

 

I hide

I try to keep it inside

But my will has died

 

I feast on those

Who hate me

And those who irritate me

 

To kill

To drink the blood

Of those who are

And are not good

 

One thing you never forget

Is the awful thrill

Of your first kill

Reviews

[Mcrfreak]

Very nice.
Maybe play around with words more, even though you've done that well enough.
I liked the third verse, for some reason, though they all sound alike.
Maybe focus on freestyle instead of rhyming, but rhyme too.

Anyway, overall, I liked it. 9/10