I Don't Deserve This

I Don't Deserve This

A Poem by Dark Poet
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I don't deserve this. My thoughts and words are meant to be heard.

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I don't deserve this
I shouldn't have to cower as you pass
Meeting your eyes can't be a sin
What makes you so much better than me?

LOOK AT YOURSELF DARLING
DO YOU HONESTLY BELIEVE SOMEBODY COULD LOVE THAT?
THAT'S RIGHT, KEEP YOUR HEAD DOWN
YOU BELONG IN THE SHADOWS

I don't deserve this
My thoughts and words are meant to be heard
I'm a person too
Would you please treat me better?

DID YOU FORGET THEY DON'T CARE?
NOBODY WANTS YOU
THEY DON'T WANT TO KNOW WHO YOU ARE
WAKE UP, CHILD, HE'S GOING TO LEAVE AND SHE ALREADY HAS

I deserve this
All these nights I spend shaking in my bed
Knowing I'll never be worth something
I'll just listen to that voice in my head
And just continue loving

© 2015 Dark Poet


Author's Note

Dark Poet
The dialogue we have with our biggest enemy, ourself.

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Powerful and honest emotions. We can be led by desperate need.
"I'll just listen to that voice in my head
And just continue loving"
The above lines Solid and meaningful. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I struggle with accepting myself as well. I can't look in the mirror without feeling either disappointed or confused. either the person I see is truly me and I'm completely unappealing, or I have no idea who they are and, of course, they are completely unappealing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


You come through as an honest, caring person. You can never go wrong writing from the heart because the heart doesn't lie. I think you write very well. You have a talent.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dark Poet

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much
Pete

8 Years Ago

Would you be willing to look at some of mine? Thanks.
Dark Poet

8 Years Ago

Yes i will check some out as soon as i get the chance:)
I know how you feel my friend. Beautiful poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awww right im here for you

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful and honest emotions. We can be led by desperate need.
"I'll just listen to that voice in my head
And just continue loving"
The above lines Solid and meaningful. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sounds like this is personal. Ouch :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


I read your author's note, and can say from my own experience that those are 100% true words.

Now that that's out of the way, I have to say that this is a powerful piece. I can tell that you have a lot of thoughts on this topic, and you are absolutely right, you do deserve better treatment. I'm not just saying this, but I think that you are one of the strongest writers I have ever come across on this website, and any where else. Fantastically said :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dark Poet

8 Years Ago

I've never gotten a better compliment about my writing:) thank you again
DoormanDan

8 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
The emotions in this one are quite palpable... Life is always unfair ma'am... Nobody, not even you have the right to judge who deserves what.

I loved the way you have structured your poem.. Like a conversation. . Look at this line -
"DID YOU FORGET THEY DON'T CARE?" - They just don't care. Your expectation that they should care is the root cause of all sorrow. If they don't give a damn, it's their loss, they are missing a wonderful person. Never let anyone underestimate you (and that includes yourself as well)..

A good write :)



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dark Poet

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
TheLostMind

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.
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jb
We all have mixed feelings....great expression :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a beautiful write. I am glad you shared this... I love the way you write, your style and your thoughts. Also, I like on your profile where you said you're sad enough to write poetry again... I guess that's kind of how I got back to writing. Awesome work I look forward to reading more :)

Posted 9 Years Ago



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