10 word competition

I wrote this for a 10-word competition that I thought would be fun. Nothing too serious. I will probably not edit this and forget that I wrote it. It is supposed to be silly and comical.

“How can you justify killing the rooster with a large dosage of calcium carbonate?” Said the lawyer while pointing his old misshapen finger at the accused. The room remained silent while awaiting an answer from the defendant. But he sat still and licked his lips, all the while keeping his eyes set on the open jar of jelly that was set on the table.

“Surely you must have something to say for yourself?” The towering frail man continued. The defendant laid his head down and closed his eyes knowing that the sweet caviar taste of the Jelly will never grace his tongue as long as the old man was in one of his moods.

Suddenly the door swung open making a wave of dust fly through the air. In stepped a man wearing a white coat and holding a tabloid in his hand.

“Now Mr. Mann, who are you talking to with such fervor? You woke up your neighbor Mrs. Mujer.” The man steps in and sees the accused with his head resting on the ground and walks over to him. The old lawyer stammers to defend his case “He, he, he did it. I know he did.”

“Are you talking about that old chicken that used to be here? That was years ago. Did you forget to take your medication?” The man said as he kneeled and pet the large dog. The dog lifted his head and licked the attendant once and again rested his head on the floor. “Don’t forget to take your medication, I’ll send the nurse in to make sure you do. Ok?” The attending doctor continued before walking out the door.

Author's Note

This was just for fun.

Reviews

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Mr. Mann... i like that name. It's kind of like not giving him a name at all lol. Why stress your head about what a proper name should be or use the same name over again? Genus! Don't take this the wrong way, i mean it in a positive way. If i knew the world i would use it for the reason I'm saying.

Anyway, interesting story. I enjoyed the read! :)

[David R Gonzalez]

That was pretty much my mindset. also Mrs. Mujer means Mrs. woman... I did not even try to come up with names. Just wanted to be funny with it.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Oh i didn't know that about Mrs. Mujer. Interesting.

[Ruth]

This is so cool, a free form that is cleverly thought out, really enjoyed this :)

[David R Gonzalez]

thank you for reading and taking the time to comment I appreciate it.

[Ruth]

Most welcome :)

[Harley Quinn]

It should be more than "just for fun." I would like to read more about this story! :P

[David R Gonzalez]

Maybe in the future. I'll keep that in mind :)

[Stan Lee]

I was actually kinda jealous when I read this story. It has a sort of delirious feel but it all came together in a crazy sort of way at the end. I think you have a nice writing style. You really drew the reader in with the wacky first sentence! The only thing I might consider changing, is ending with the word "continued". Another word might make it feel more finished. :) Nice story!

[David R Gonzalez]

thank you for the compliment. I see what you mean by not feeling finished. At first I had written a bit more but what I wrote did not really add to the story just made it longer. perhaps in the future I will elaborate and make this into a full story.

[Stan Lee]

You could say:

“Don’t forget to take your medication, I’ll send the nurse in to make sure you do.” The attending doctor continued, before walking out the door.

Walking out the door would have a more 'end scene' feel.
Just an idea :)

[David R Gonzalez]

thanks! I will use it!

[Manu]

I couldn't stop myself from commenting on this. This was real fun to read. I really liked the creativity of using those 10 words in creating one entertaining story. Great thought. Nicely written.

[David R Gonzalez]

Thank you, I am glad you commented and found it fun to read!

[Zeldablue]

Imaginative and amusing. Nicely done!

[CK_85]

Mr. Mann and Mrs. Mujer. Love it! xD

[David R Gonzalez]

I am very glad you got it! I thought that would be a fun thing I could do too make it a bit more comical.

[Wicahpi]

Giggles. I know that this was a challenge to come up with any kind of story using the 10 given words, but that in itself is the challenge. Either you have the gift of creativity and imagination or you don't (or you simply don't care to make the effort). I'd say you darn sure gave the effort and used your imagination and wit. Nicely done! Congratulations.

[David R Gonzalez]

thank you for taking the time to read this and review. I very much appreciate it.

[Samuel Dickens]

Was this about me? Ha! It's wacky, but ya gotta do what you gotta do to use those words up. Quite imaginative, David.

[David R Gonzalez]

Thanks! thank you for taking the time to read this.

[Hi]

Who hasn't been in this situation; those jars of jelly will get you every time.

[David R Gonzalez]

I know right. Hah!