The Night's Final Bite

The Night's Final Bite

A Poem by David the writer

 They howl

 They growl

 They pounce upon the ground

 Their slobber dripp from their fangs all around

 

 It's night, and the villagers scramble to their home, and pray for deer life

 But even they know that it's not going to stop the night

 The villagers know their life is about to end, but yet they strife

  

 Here they come through the the village, and they arrive to give you the final bite

 Just when you thought they was light

 At the end of your tunnel, but there was only the darkness

 You painfully fade with one bite as you hear the village being burned to ashes

© 2012 David the writer


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I thought it was alright, but while i was reading it, it didn't sound right, like it didn't feel like it flowed smoothly, which is something i think is very important in poetry. Not bad, but I feel it could use some revision :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


oops, 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is really, really good

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is so dark and so twisted and so... you. lol I liked this a lot, hun. Rating 100/100.

Posted 7 Years Ago


A. V. Madison

7 Years Ago

Yeah, I know you well enough to know that sweetheart lol xD
David the writer

7 Years Ago

Aw, thanx Maddie
A. V. Madison

7 Years Ago

Of course ^-^
'deer' is an animal... i think you mean 'dear'; 'just when you thought they was light' they should be there?; I like the idea... it would make a really interesting short story:) great write!
~Dreamer!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Timeless-Chan

7 Years Ago

oh alright:)
David the writer

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading, Dreamer
Timeless-Chan

7 Years Ago

course^_^

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