Mind Games

It's a surprise!

 

His eyes deep brown, hair black silk

 

     BREATHTAKING…sigh

 

His fingers caressing the French linen table cover

     

         Mmm…SEXY

 

My heart mounted wings, my soul took flight

 

             I’m…SOARING

 

What was he thinking? This mysterious man

 

      Helplessly…ENRAPTURED

 

Perhaps it was the intrigue in his eyes

 

             Like magic…ALLURING

 

The language his body seemed to speak

 

           TAUNTING…me

 

In any case, I quickly grabbed the last hot roll!

 

           Yeah baby!...SIZZLING

 

One can never be sure of the thoughts lurking

    within the chambers a famished mind…

 

             Mmm…

                    Pass the butter, Please!

Author's Note

I love the art of creating an illusion, only to leave the reader shaking their head at the finish line! Besides, I'm a double entendre junkie! I hope you enjoy your roll!

Reviews

[Beka]

Brilliant.
I totally LOL'd in class
My teacher gave me a death stare then read it.
Found it funny.
Whole class read it.
Some didn't get it.
Idiots.
Anyway I love it.
I was completely expecting something.
Way to take advantage of the fith that the human mind has become so open about.
^_^

[Mark T. Littlejohn]

LOL...i sure wasnt expecting you to take the last roll...LOL!!!

[The Outlaws' Song]

This is totally awesome and unique. Very clever shot!!!! I really really enjoyed it!!!

Very well done!!!

[closed account]

haha!! love the twist, I think you know what the readers were thinking. This was very good.. :-)

[Ruby Moon]

hahaha...
being that i came here to read this piece from the contest site,
i was well warned to keep my mind "clean"
then i re read it to get the "risque" part (didnt mention about it not invading my mind on the first reading)
i think you should enter your own contest and get first place
haha...should keep mind clean...dont know what is the truth
moral of review, listen (or read) till the end before making any conclusions

[J. Marc]

Very pleasant to read! I loved the lightness of tone and the playful mood. That all this is taking place around a table makes the whole thing even more......delectable! Thank you for such a brilliant exercise in � human � appraisal� I am sure many other readers will use this poem for a future reference.

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

the title fits just rite
haha that was very well written indeed! leave the loop until the end qhite the writer's trick! i love your use of structure. it's very refreshing. i feel your passion in your poems. with the bold in your face words tha you use in seperation

[ElJays Nicholas]

Hilarious! "One can never be sure what thoughts lurk within the chambers of the mind," is speaking about the reader expecting something other than the hot roll LOL! Excellent play of language, and the joke is on us. Very clever......

[radian7]

Clever. I love works with a twist. Appealing physical format too.

[Susan M. Fenn]

ROFLMFAO!!!!!!!!!!!! I absolutely LOVE this. And I was definitely in the gutter! Pass the butter!!! HAHAHAHAHA Simply brilliant dear.

[Karen James]

I love the mind game here. The standalone words add to the power of the piece.