Thoughts of the Broken

She weighed out each word, terrified of what to say

Worrying any wrong word might drive him away

"I love you" he said, Oh but was it true?

She believed but she worried, as most broken girls do

With each moment of quiet her heart stopped to beat

Worried one day, her mouth would cause her own defeat

With him her heart sang, he gave her wings to fly

But she knew once he left, her light would die

For every touch from him fixed her cracks

He held her in his arms when the world turned their backs

She worried, because without him she wouldnt survive

For with him, now she knew how it felt to be alive.

Reviews

[K. Bridgid]

This is incredible, and very relatable. To me it really shows how powerful love is and how destructive it is as well. My favorite was when you wrote "But she knew once he left, her light would die" because I have recently gone through the exact feeling. Very powerful, true and relatable. Beautifully written. I love it.

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much! It means alot that people are not only enjoying my work but also relating to it. That's the beauty of writing, showing others they are not alone. I hope you are doing okay, and Don't lose your light Brigid. :) It's a beautiful one

[PonoEllis]

indeed Shadow

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

you writes very heart touching poetries . how you do this ?

[PonoEllis]

this one left me speechles so well made, got to totally agree with the other reviews

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so very much Pono! You always give me a confidence boost!

[PonoEllis]

That's good to hear :)

[andrew mitchell]

Expressed with flow, rhyme, flair and lovely emotion.I had to read this again to enjoy the flow and the choice of words were excellent. nice work

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much! I was worried at first it might sound a little clumsy but I'm glad it didn't come across that way :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Beautifully written.....expressing raw sentiments so true of such a situation. I think you probably meant to use "quiet" in line 5 instead of "quite"? :)

[Death's Poet]

thank you!!! and yes I did! Thank you for catching that

[gypsynight]

I love this, it hits home.