Facing Dawn

Facing Dawn
 

Facing Dawn Watching streams of light slowly touch the sky I listen to a nightingale sing her sweet lullaby As the day awakens, I wonder what may come The loneliness of yesterday until I just feel numb The darkness is fading now lightened by suns rays Is this my hell on earth shall I miss you all my days I don't want to see another Dawn Lost and alone Is this my retribution for all that I must now atone? I would give all I have just to have you by my side To feel you kiss me tenderly as our souls coincide I drift along on memories as wonderful as they seem Reality brakes though again to find it was but a dream… 1/ 16,/ 2008 By DebbyStevensEdw   © 2008 DebbyStevensEdw (All rights reserved)

Reviews

[The Outlaws' Song]

I totally agree with Carole.It sounds like a call to love.Wonderfully done.I love it.

Kudos

[Murphy]

this poem is stirring... i can feel dawn stirring as she awakens, calling all creatures to begin yet another day in this cycle of life. i love the imagery here, but as beautiful as dawn can be, sometimes it can hurt like hell.

[Carole]

Sounds like a Dove's call to her love. This is precious. I hope he comes back! Where, oh where, did he go?
This poem flows beautifully and draws its reader in with simple ease and elegance...

Watching streams of light slowly touch the sky

I listen to a nightingale sing her sweet lullaby



As the Dawn awakens, I wonder what May come

The loneliness of yesterday until I just feel numb

He--whomever he is, needs to read this...

[Blackbirdsong]

There is such a lovely feeling to this poem. It feels like dawn, if that makes any sense. That wonderful quiet time right before the sun rises, when the world is gentled and you can just watch everything around you wake up.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Bittersweet.. such a lovely dream .. sad it is only a dream..
I like it.. sure make me feel sad though..

Chloe
xoxo

[Yvonne Heidt]

Haunting and very sweet.

My favorite line:
Is this my retribution for all that I must now atone?

Great job.

[Emily B]

So sad and heart-breaking. Contrasting the darkness of lost and lonely with the dawn is particularly effective here.

[Rodney Ray Hatchell / U..]

You have wrote a lovely piece..Keep up the great writing,, but remember it's part of your soul that share such emptiness at times as does all writers,,GBU, RodneyRay

[Jenny Davis]

Such passion and longing in this piece..truly heartfelt and vivid! :)