The unwanted visitor

This was how I felt after my first love left me and I became cynical about love.

Go away

you've overstayed your stay

don't come back 

you are not welcome here 

you came to visit

bringing a warm, tingling sensation 

growing, and spreading,

invading my heart, penetrating its icy barrier 

you didn't stay long

2 months at best

now leave, begone! 

and let me rest 

and again I say

you've overstayed your stay

please go away

you are not welcome here

Though while I'm young, my heart shall dance

"Okay love", says I, I'll give you another chance 

Author's Note

This is my first attempt at a Sonnet, yeah it doesn't follow iambic pentameter so what.

Reviews

[Akira]

I like it a lot. I can't say 'overstayed your stay' was the best wording though. Perhaps 'overstayed your welcome'?

Other than that I think this writing is very nice :) Good job!

[Deidara]

Thanks, I didn't expect people to read or comment on my work. I just felt like putting it out here. At the time of writing it I wasn't aiming to make a masterpiece or do anything profound I just felt like capturing my emotions.

[Akira]

You're welcome. I understand that completley... that's what I do with my poems.