Splatter

a little snippet of horror

Drip,Drip, Drip
the smile widens
drip, drip, drip
i'm drawing pictures mommy aren't you proud
drip drip drip
follow each drop to the ground
drip...drip...drip
the downpour slows
drip...drip...drip
down and down and down it flows
drip...drip
i finish my master peice
drip...drip
existing only in their last release
drip..drip
blood is so hard to get out of clothes
drip...
so it's just as well no one knows
where i am
and then there was silence

 

Reviews

[Sexy P3nguin]

Ohh CREEPY!! Amazing job with this write. It has a nice atmosphere and I can imagine a little kid doing this O_o

[funeralmoon]

very nice.. good atmosphere in the writing. :)

Blood is ever so hard to get out of clothes isnt it?
I loved that line, made me smile slightly.
Well done!
-ST

[After Midnight]

Oh very good. I liked the drips. That was pretty cool.

[Tickle me not]

Creepy. Twisted. Very nice!

[Rachel]

nice...very serial. the there you used was supposed to be their though. Keep on keepin' on mojo.

[The Dark Passenger]

gorgeous work- i agree with your other review though, perhaps just a little too much emphasis on the word "drip"... maybe if there was a little bit more variation... a different word, a range... to show it growing and swelling or slowing and stopping.
All the same, i love your imagery and idea :)
"i'm drawing pictures mommy aren't you proud"... wow... just wow.

[Voltaire Mephisto (aka ..]

Good and twisted, but I felt there were too many drips.