How Beautiful Are Thy Feet With Shoes

 How fair and how pleasant you are, O love, for delights!

Unveil as wantons will.

 Drop your robes of green, your robes of gold.

Reveal to me your nakedness.

Stretch out your white limbs, tremble in the air.

There is no skin so smooth, so cool to my touch.

Your neck is as a tower of ivory.

 Come, my beloved, let us go forth into the field.

How fair and how pleasant are you, O love, for delights!

My beloved is white and ruddy,

Come for me Beloved.

 Awake, O north wind; and come now south; blow upon my garden,

Blow away care and garment.

Reveal now beauty cruel and kind wind.

That the spices thereof may flow out.

Author's Note

Nature from Solomon.

Reviews

[SheIsMe]

I loved this! I was eager to see what the next line had in store. I enjoyed how vivid your description of her skin and neck was and how fluidly everything melded together. Lovely write.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for reading. While I have ambitions in the short story department I know I am no poet. Most of the poem-like word gobs I have posted here are note for short stories that never quickened and died in the womb.

[SheIsMe]

I feel like those can make the best poems.

[rew]

Now, I like this although most, if not all, references escape me.
i do like the way you just jump in, with both feet, as it were, and the sensuality come across quite well although, it seems from my viewpoint that you have used disparate lines and stitched these together to fit the bill.

Having said that it does work well - although, there is one glaring mistake which as I set out to read this it made me think you were merely playing (plus the title doesn't help in making this piece serious)
and the mistake? Using '' wontons '' instead of ''wanton''

However it is your work and there will be things of which I am unaware which compelled you in your direction so I shall shut up now and clear orf!
Now, everything here is meant kindly so
kind regards from rew

[Delmar Cooper]

Well the Chinese gotta eat too. Good catch.

[rew]

thank you for taking it so nicely

[CD Campbell]

The language is biblically wonderful. It was a great idea on your part to make a connection with the song of Solomon, something I dont have the balls to do. It would be a crime not to mention the sensuality in nature, like the other reviews, but that is the genius in the poem and the whole point.

I have two books on Angel's and demons. Solomon is mentioned quite a bit in them. Supposedly he conjured djinn and other spirits to help build the temple. Very interesting stuff. The song of solomon is the most poetic book in the bible besides the psalms. This outstanding work of yours reminds me it has been a long time since I read them. Maybe I should make it a priority to go over them again. All the best. Hope your enjoying the coming of fall.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for your comments. I suppose my favorite poet, excepting your good self, is King David. I suspect I am prejudiced in his favor because he spoke a lot like Wm. Shakespeare, in Elizabethan English, or so my KJV Bible purports. Any writer in our culture needs to read the Bible once a year, just to stay grounded in what and who we are, or should be culturally. Leonard Cohen was truly inspired when he wrote “Hallelujah”, culturally, musically. So it seemed the least I could do – borrowing from the KJV shamelessly.
You have been busy. I see that and like a poor correspondent I have been postponing telling you so. Frankly I have doubted my ability to do justice. I will begin to correct that soon.
So yeah, Song of songs and the sycamore tree in my back yard have cultural commonality in my mind.

[Neville]

Shoes, good one's mind maketh a woman......A delightful read indeed...................Neville

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks Neville, glad you read it.

[Neville]

no problem whatsoever, my pleasure................Neville.

[Samuel Dickens]

This is what I call fancy writin'. Being ignorant of the various forms of poetry, I will say that this is exhilarating, sensuous and fun to read.

[L. Michelle Corp]

Everyone else saw nature, I saw only sensuality. To me, this poem was about creation; conception... and I loved it. I'd like to keep it somewhere close and read it every day.

[Delmar Cooper]

I borrowed liberally from the Bible. They say steal from the best.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

It's very beautiful, describing, great imagery and metaphor. You've certainly have talent, you know. :)

Rudi

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you. Kind words from a person of your sensability and talent are priceless.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

You know there a great lot op poets who are better than me, but thank you for your kind remarks. Always my pleasure. :)

Rudi

[Alfred Kukitz]

There are times when the writer is blessed with gift from the rare portion of his divine being. I say this because it is here!