Still Stuck Here

Don't be foolish Darlin'
We all have our own perspective
Underneath it all every one is obsessive
Yeah I'm shallow, insane, and a bit idiotic
Don't look inside, I'm anything but hypnotic

So just turn away, never let me reach you
You'll come to regret ever letting me through

But if you're just askin about my day
I guess, its been okay
Just sittin here, I don't have any fears
of sad regrets or lonesome tears
Just have a beer, Light another smoke
We'll laugh and sing and tell bad jokes

Take a walk with me around the bend
Kicking dirt and making friends
On the banks of the Ohio
Theres not much to do
Always wasting time but

I'm glad to have you

Yeah here in town I was feeling a little down
Then you came along, sang to me that old song
of empty skies and fading times,
Broken hearts and dirty highs

It made me laugh, yeah it made me cry
Oh babe, I don't want to say good bye
As I let the nights pass, watch the days fly
Coasting on the edge but I've found a warmer place
To rest my head a while as my mind is lost in space.

Author's Note

This is a bit older than the works I've been posting, Its about my boyfriend, when we first met, and I think it has more of a southern feel to it, I just let this one flow, with out really over thinking it.

Reviews

[al25]

Wow! This is so good. I really mean it this amazing. Everything about the poem works well from your wording to the way you present the poem as some sort of dialogue between you and him. Very well done. Enjoyed reading this.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

I love it...
my fav...
I don't think i need 2 gave a long review 4 this one.
it's fine the way it is...:)

[Sasha]

wow! really nice flow. you're right.
and it's good, you wouldn't wanna think too much about the poem otherwise it looses it's natural way.
Great work. (:

[Sports Girl]

Great job. I liked it. Good work.

[Miss Coral]

Great job... the rhythm was a bit forced to me at first, but once I got into it, it was super smooth.. I really like the genuine tone laying underneath your words, and the subtlety of the rhyme scheme. Nice write. c:

[Candylove.]

I love everything about this piece, there's a certain tinge of longing and desire that presides over it. It's simple, but yet complex. A beautiful poem! :)