Its still hard to breathe

I can never figure out

what it is in your eyes

I'm not sure if its lust

or love

that you hide

 

Your fingers spread

over

my back

Smooth as glass

Imprinting

my skin

with your own broken past

 

I sigh in the moonlight, kissing

every curve

Lost in your arms, you smell so good

it hurts

 

I'm dangling from your strings,

you've got me tied

to your hands

I have to

...escape...

 

these feelings I shouldn't have

 

But you give me that smile

and kiss

the curve of my neck

My broken heart

flutters weakly

in my chest

 

I'm trying to hold back 

I always wonder if you see

What I'm going through,

how hard

it

is

to breathe

 

You're the light

shining

through this

dust filled room

 

I try to open up

but I just can't tell you

That really

I am falling

way to fast,

 

 I just don't think

I'll ever have the guts

 

to tell you that.

Reviews

[Nayeli]

It's so simple and well put. :] And I really enjoy the very last line for some reason.

I love how the last sets of words are rhymed only ever so vaguely. They'd be considered a stretch and maybe even force of rhyme if you were rhyming usually (like you and to), but every set is like this. (room and you, for example.)

Very nicely done. ^^

[Crinkle°]

absolutely beautiful. It flows like as if by magic, and it's very moving, according to me.

[David W Moore III]

it is a tightrope we walk. you have to lay yourself out there not knowing whether it will be returned or not, but as the stupidly cliche (but hard to beat) saying goes, "no pain, no gain" Very well written, just enough surreal to make it interesting. Thanks for sharing

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This was so surreal. I felt every word of it.
I was moved.

a familiar feeling.

[M.Kilani]

it is hard to breathe when it's hard to tell love from lust, moreover holding love inside being insecure, not sure if it's love you're feeling or illusion of love ... nicely written fascinating to the last verse ... well done

[Norma M Sutton]

Nicely written.

[Robin]

one feels the sighs and deep breaths within these words ~

[Charles]

You have a beautiful sense of rhythm and a great imagination. Your words flow with an ease that I envy. Well written work.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

this was so sad....
very emotional...

[Omar Fendri]

oww ! splendid. Blustering love... "Your fingers spread over my back Smooth as glass" Wow so beautiful imagination :)
as always, you made an excellent job here. well-done :)