Water Had Gotten Into My Shoes

I stepped on a water puddle and looked down.
My heart-shaped face seemed frozen into a frown.

A little girl walked by and touched my hand,
Then I smiled, and started to understand.

My world is a lonely one in a good day,
And if I ever tried to change it... I couldn't say.

To my left was a man with his head between his legs
He needed money to buy his family at least a dozen eggs.

No luck had he, no one gave him a dime.
An older fellow he was, no longer on his prime.

To my right stood a single mom
Never have I ever seen someone look so alone.

I got tired of all the depressive crap
And finally, oh finally, I began to act.

I gave the girl a big smile,
The man a couple bucks,
The woman a pat in the back
For me I bought socks.

Water had gotten into my shoes...

Reviews

[Lewis Jane]

I really liked the message in this, which to me meant if you want change, or to change someones day then you have to act. It's nice and positive.

I would say it seems like a few typos were left which may not have been noticed? such as 'on his prime'

other than that really enjoyed it thanks for sharing

[Jessica Lima]

Right you are. I dont think i have ever edited any of my work... im lazy in that sense

[Zoya]

Nice message conveyed through a short and sweet poem. Keep writing!

[Tim]

Many live among the depressive crap and say what can I do about it, that's just the way it is. I like your ending here. It's positive and proactive.

[Poeticme]

That's a very sweetie poem, your character shines through in this wonderfully beautiful write, what a kind soul you are.

Poeticme

[Mr.Writer]

sUPERB!! Keep it up :)))
Shaan