tattoo

Is it so written on my face?

The pain, the scars, can't be erased

My past is there, underneath the skin

The present penetrates, sneaks it's way in

The ink youve set seeps through my pores

You left me broke, alone and torn

And now it's there, forever on display

Over time it may gently fade

The pain of the removal would be far worse

But I'd consider it, for what it's worth.

The pain eventually would go away

And I wouldn't have to relive it every day

Look in the mirror and what do I do?

See you in my face

Like a brand new tattoo

Reviews

[nigrum homonculus]

the thing i like about your poetry Annabelle is that it really does come from deep within. i always get a sense of strong emotion in your pieces and the way you express them is bloody brilliant. sorry i haven't reviewed in a while, been busy. but keep at it! you're getting hell of alot better!

[Annabelle Lee]

VIRGO! You're back! Thanks for reading, We missed you!!!

[River Page]

I usually despise anything that is ritten is first person. I feel like the overuse of first person narritive is one of the major flaws of our generation. But here I think it works. Some stories cannot be told from the outside. To me this is not a poem that any teenage girl could write. Great job Annabelle!

[Annabelle Lee]

Thanks! I'm glad I could be the exception!

[LA Lorena]

the rhyme and meter were very good throughout this piece, and I could feel the emotion all the way along. You had me all the way along, but I'm sorry, the last line lost me. Or rather, the second to last word is the culprit. Your writing shows such promise. If a piece calls for it,needs to express it strongly enough to call for a curse word, then use the damn word! Effing is wishy-washy. Your poem is not.

[Annabelle Lee]

thank you, I will fix that. and thank you for jot being afraid to give me a bit of friticism. i fear most peiple worry too much about my adolescent feelijgs.

[Annabelle Lee]

*not
*criticism
*people
*feelings

[LA Lorena]

LOL! I will ALWAYS say the truth, but do endevour to do it in such a way as to not hurt feelings. If I didn't think you could take it, and your work was crap, I would simply not bother to review. You seem to have a maturity, an honest desire to improve, and you write well. It is my priviledge to share old broad wisdom with you. ;)

[Annabelle Lee]

haha you may be many things but you ar most definitely not an old broad.

[LA Lorena]

and you are one smart kid! ;) LOL

[LA Lorena]

and this poem, and the almost 4 letter word inspired me to write a funny poem, which damned WC ate as I was posting. Of course, I had not put it on paper, so it is lost forever...but I had wrote a poem with not one 4 letter word in it.

[Annabelle Lee]

ah. that happened several times in the course of writing a poem that resembled this and i got so angry. im not sure what the issue is but it needs to be fixed

[Patrick Henry]

That was impressive. To use rhyme to not match the words specifically, but to mix it up as you did.... and do it THAT well. : ) Nice!! I had to go back a page and check your age again. lol A very smart, all around, poem that seems to teach itself how real but temporary pain can be...... and what a pain in the a*s it can be!! The style you wrote it in, the sarcasm, the wit, the strong perspective, and that righteous believability was awesome to read. xoxo -Mark

[Annabelle Lee]

Thank you! I always get people telling me I did well or I didn't but they rarely tell me why it was so good or what they like about it. Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Patrick Henry]

Thank YOU!! : ) It's part of the reason why I like reading you, and a great reason to return to you if you allow my name to be able to. : ) xoxo -Mark

[Annabelle Lee]

absolutely, thanks again!

[amarlaksh]

Wow exceptional piece!!!

[Annabelle Lee]

thank you!

[Baby Ricochet]

Love it! One of my faves by you

[Annabelle Lee]

thanks! I just sorta got an idea for it while i wa looking at my dad's ink and it was bugging me all day